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    In the days following his wife's death

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    In the days following his wife's death, David did all kinds of jobs around his house to avoid thinking of her. He chopped off branches, cut the wood, grated leaves, painted the fence and replaced broken roof tiles. But when her picture came up in his mind, he felt a pang sadness and was unable to do start with anything.

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    Re: In the days following his wife's death

    How on earth does one "grate leaves"? Did you perhaps mean "raked leaves"?
    I'd use "image", not "picture".
    "to do start" is incorrect.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: In the days following his wife's death

    I meant to write "raked leaves."

    I will repeat my sentence.

    In the days following his wife's death, David did all kinds of jobs around his house to avoid thinking of her. He chopped off branches, cut the wood, raked fallen leaves. painted the fence and replaced broken roof tiles. But when her image came up in his mind, he felt a pang of sadness and was unable to start with anything.

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    Re: In the days following his wife's death

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I meant to write "raked leaves."

    I will repeat my sentence.

    In the days following his wife's death, David did all kinds of jobs around his house to avoid thinking of her. He chopped off branches, cut the wood, raked fallen leaves, painted the fence and replaced broken roof tiles. But whenever her image came up into his mind, he felt a pang of sadness and was unable to start with anything.
    See my changes above. I'm confused about the end. He clearly was able to start lots of things (all the work you listed). Perhaps it would be better to say that whenever he thought of her, he found he could not continue doing anything, or he had to stop what he was doing.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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