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    A Malaysian Movie, Malay Regiment

    Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you.

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    The story of service of military personnel in defending the homeland from communist threats has attracted grandchildren of Captain Zainal, Lt Hamid and Lt. Young Razak to find out more exactly what happened when his grandfather served as a military. The meeting with Major Retired General Abu Bakr has revealed all the questions and stories behind the battle that took place when their grandfather fought.

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    This war film is based on the real-life events of Ops Kota Gubir I & II, where security teams from the 17 RAMD unit have ambushed several communist camps at the border of Thai-Malaysia, near Gubir, Kedah.

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    Re: A Malaysian Movie, Malay Regiment

    This is not well written. Whose grandfather are you talking about? Rewrite it in a clear and simple manner.

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    Re: A Malaysian Movie, Malay Regiment

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    This is not well written. Whose grandfather are you talking about? Rewrite it in a clear and simple manner.
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    This movie revolves around three children who want to learn about the sacrifices of their grandfathers from the 17 RAMD unit who served on the Malay Regiment against the communists in 1976. The meeting with Major Retired General Abu Bakr has revealed all the questions and stories behind the battle that took place when their grandfathers fought. Their grandfather's story has convinced them all to make them proud to be part of the heirs of fighters who defended the country from communist threats.

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    Re: A Malaysian Movie, Malay Regiment

    Quote Originally Posted by Gaya87 View Post
    This movie revolves around three children who want to learn about the sacrifices of their grandfathers from the 17 RAMD unit who served on in the Malay 17-RAMD Regiment and fought against the communists in 1976. The meeting with retired Major Retired General Abu Bakr has revealed all the questions and brings up all kinds of stories behind about the battle that took place when their grandfathers fought in. Their grandfather's story has convinced them all to That makes them proud to be part of the heirs the descendants of fighters who defended the country from communist threats.
    Quote Originally Posted by Gaya87 View Post
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    This war film is based on the real-life events of Ops Kota Gubir I & II, where security teams from the 17-RAMD unit have ambushed several communist camps at the border of Thai-Malaysia border, near Gubir, Kedah.
    I'm not sure if the two summaries tally.

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    Re: A Malaysian Movie, Malay Regiment

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    I'm not sure if the two summaries tally.
    Maybe I'll re-write the short summary. Thanks for the feedback teechar.

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