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    Michael was heavy drinker

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Michael was heavy drinker. Once he fell into delirium tremens and set fire to his house. He danced and sang in his garden, to the horror to his neighbours who watched his property consumed quickly by flames.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

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    Michael was heavy drinker.
    Fix that.

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    Once he fell into delirium tremens
    Rephrase that.

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    He danced and sang in his garden, to the horror to his neighbours who watched his property being consumed quickly by the flames.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    I will write my sentence again.

    Michael was a heavy drinker. He once fell into delirium tremens and set fire to his house. He danced and sang in his garden, to the horror to his neighbours who watched his property being consumed quickly by the flames.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    Try "had an attack of delirium tremens" instead.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    teechar,

    I am just wondering is it correct to have adverb "once" at the beginning of my sentence.

    1. Once he had an attack of delirium tremens.

    Is it grammatically correct to put it behind "he" like this?
    He once had an attack of deliriium tremens.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

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    teechar,

    I am just wondering if it's is it correct to have the adverb "once" at the beginning of my sentence.

    Is it grammatically correct to put it behind before "he" like this?

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    1. Once he had an attack of delirium tremens.
    A little comma would go a long way in making that sentence work.

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    He once had an attack of delirium tremens.
    That one is okay.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    'Delirium tremens' sounds very clinical, and thus a bit unnatural in this context to me. I'd see about using some lay terms, although off the top of my head I can't think of one term for the hallucinations. The minor tremors are more commonly referred to as 'the shakes', at least in AmE.

    Google claims AmE slang for the condition is "D.T's", although that's a new one for me.
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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    Use "alcohol withdrawal syndrome". It may not be the exact same but people will have an easier time reading your passage.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    Honestly, I don't think "delirium tremens" sounds clinical, strange or unnatural in my sentence. It is a well-known term. In BrE it is "DTs"; in AmE D.T.'s. Michael sets fire to his house because of the state of his mind.

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    Re: Michael was heavy drinker

    I actually had to Google the term, so I question how well-known it is. I've never heard the acronym, either.
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