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    As Belinda watched her husband

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    As Belinda watched her husband reading his newspaper and sipping his coffee, a thought stirred her mind that he was hiding something from her. Her intuition warned her that behind his calmness a storm was raging.

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    Re: As Belinda watched her husband

    I would use "read" and "sip" (instead of "reading" and "sipping) in the above.
    I would also say "stirred in her mind."
    Finally, I would add a comma after "calmness."

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    Re: As Belinda watched her husband

    I have no problems with the use of "reading" or "sipping" in your sentence.

    I do agree with "a thought stirred in her mind" and the comma after "calmness".
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