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    Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    I would be grateful if someone would correct my essay.

    Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solved, while others think that individuals cannot solve these environmental problems unless governments make some action.


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    The environment has become, the most serious concern in the, especially last couple of decades. It involves many vital issues such as global warming, terrestrial and aquatic creatures death, river and trees drying.It is said that preserving the environment is the responsibility of government and people as an individual couldn't do anything whereas other people don't think so. This essay will discuss this two point of views to exhibit were the responsibility of protecting environment lays down.

    If the industry hadn't grown so fast there wouldn't have been any concern about the natural world. In order to find out the solution, the reasons of the problem have been probed and the human being was found as the main victim!When We cut down the trees to make products, the event called deforestation will occur and since the trees protect the soil beneath them and inhibit the growth of algae, destroying the soil, will damage the habitat.The other way that people affect the environment depends on the gas which is emitted from the factories and cars.Since these activities lead to making money, governments should interfere to stop such activity by making prohibiting laws.
    Otherwise, what happens if the government doesn't do its duty very well.What can each of people do individually?It is believed that if any body takes care about what he/she does, the world is getting better.At least we can decrease the speed of world's destruction.For example, we can use fewer products that are made from wood.less air, and water pollution are the other affairs, the citizen should keep in mind to guarantee the healthy life.

    In conclusion, it is clear that both government and people are responsible for the natural world.I wish human being had noticed the importance of safety of natural world so we haven't had any problem with the world.
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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    Quote Originally Posted by aspnet_22 View Post
    Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solve,
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    while others think that individuals cannot solve these environmental problems unless governments make take some action.
    The highlighted part is not in contrast to the first part! Where did you get that essay prompt? Was that the full prompt?

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    Thank you.I agree with you.I got the question from the net and I didn't pay attention to this mistake.

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    Quote Originally Posted by aspnet_22 View Post
    Thank you. I agree with you. I got the question from the net and I didn't pay attention to notice this mistake.
    See above. It's important to put a space after every full stop. Also, you should say that you didn't "notice" (see/spot) the mistake. If you say that you didn't pay attention to it, it means you noticed it and then ignored it.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    I would be grateful if someone would correct my essay. Thanks in advance.

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    You haven't responded to teechar's point about the lack of contrast yet. See post #2 again.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    I thought I had responded it. Please tell me more explanation. What does the teacher actually mean?

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    What was the full question? What did it ask?

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    http://www.ielts-mentor.com/writing-...s-to-be-solved
    Thank you. The full question I picked up from the above link is:
    Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to be solved, while others think that individuals cannot solve these environmental problems unless governments make some action.

    Discuss both views and give your opinion.
    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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    Re: Some people think that environmental problems are too big

    I've had a look at some of their other prompts and found the same problem.
    I don't think much of that site, I'm afraid.

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