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    Bassim is offline VIP Member
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    As the president's car passed through the village

    Please would you help me and correct the mistakes in my sentences. I am aware that my second sentence does not sound natural, but I am unable to correct it myself.

    As the president's car passed through the village, it caught fire. An old woman, sitting on her porch, said ominously, "Who comes with fire usually burns up in fire."

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    Re: As the president's car passed through the village

    Actually, your second sentence is 'correct', though it's not likely (IMHO) a native speaker would put it quite that way. It's more 'poetical' to have the prepositions match in some way: "Who comes with fire usually burns up with fire." ​sounds more probable to me.

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    Re: As the president's car passed through the village

    I might try this for the ending:

    ....."He, who comes with fire, usually burns in fire."

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    Re: As the president's car passed through the village

    You could try something more dramatic: Who brings fire burns.

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    Re: As the president's car passed through the village

    Quote Originally Posted by Lynxear View Post
    ....."He, who comes with fire, usually burns in fire."
    I would treat that as a restrictive/defining relative clause and leave the commas out.

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