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    Brian, who suffered from depression

    I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

    Brian, who suffered from depression the most part of his life, one day left everything behind and moved to Mount Athos where he became a monk.
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    Re: Brian, who suffered from depression

    ​Mouth?
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    Re: Brian, who suffered from depression

    Write "[for] most of his life". The second clause is OK but would be more natural with "one day" following "behind".
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    Re: Brian, who suffered from depression

    I will repeat my sentence.

    Brian, who suffered from depression for most of his life, left behind everything one day and moved to Mount Athos where he became a monk.

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    Re: Brian, who suffered from depression

    I would add a comma before 'where' because the relative clause is non-defining.
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    Re: Brian, who suffered from depression

    I'd use "had suffered" and write "left everything behind one day". I'd probably say "to become a monk" at the end unless he moved to Mount Athos and only later decided to become a monk.

    Actually, now that I read it back, I'd actually order it like this:

    One day, Brian, who had suffered from depression for most of his life, left everything behind and moved to Mount Athos to become a monk.
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