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    When Bob came out of prison

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    When Bob came out of prison, he was unrecognisable. While before he was great fun, now he turned into a bad-tempered person who would argue without reason. He once slapped a passersby only because the man stared at him, which Bob interpreted as a threat.

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    Re: When Bob came out of prison

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    When Bob came out of prison, he was unrecognisable. While before he was great fun, ​he was now he turned into a bad-tempered person who would argue without for no reason. He once slapped a passersby passerby only because the man stared at him, which Bob interpreted as a threat.
    See above. I might be inclined to change the beginning to "... his personality was unrecognisable". After reading your original opening sentence, I assumed you were going to describe how he used to look and how he looked after prison.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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