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    both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    Original sentence: In an experiment for a TV show, two chess players, both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    Are these following OK, too?

    In an experiment for a TV show, two chess players, who were both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    In an experiment for a TV show, two chess players, both of whom were former champions, had different meals before playing each other.
    Last edited by sania-baharat; 18-Sep-2017 at 07:15.

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    Re: both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    What is the source of the original sentence, which is just fine?

    Your alternatives add unnecessary words.

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    Re: both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    What is the source of the original sentence, which is just fine?
    Thank you.
    The source is Top Notch 3.
    I want to use main sentence too, but I just wanted to know how the original sentences was formed.

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    Re: both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    They would both be grammatically correct if you removed the commas from the first one.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    Quote Originally Posted by sania-baharat View Post
    In an experiment for a TV show, two chess players, who were both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.
    To me, that works with/without the last two commas (I would not remove the first comma).

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    Re: both former champions, had different meals before playing each other.

    I think we should make the sentence as close to the original as possible. It needs a non-restrictive relative clause, in my opinion.

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