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    Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas, rushed out of the bank, carrying plastic bags filled with the money. They got into a car parked on the opposite side of the street and drove off at high speed under the eyes of astounded passersby.

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    Re: Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas

    I wouldn't use "under the eyes of".

    ... drove off at high speed to the astonishment of [watching] passersby.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas

    I'd say 'plastic bags filled with money'.

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    Re: Three robbers, dressed as Father Christmas

    "Filled with the money" makes the reader wonder, "which money?" You can include the article if a previous sentence said something like "Terrified clerks shoved handfuls of cash into plastic bags." Otherwise, omit it.
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