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    As Peter was walking along the dark, narrow alley

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    As Peter was walking along the dark, narrow alley, someone pulled at his sleeve. He jerked, turned around and found himself face to face with an old, wizened woman. She reached out her gnarled hand saying, "Please." Peter dug into his pocket, found some coins and tossed at her before rushing away.

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    Re: As Peter was walking along the dark, narrow alley

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    As Peter was walking along the dark, narrow alley, someone pulled at his sleeve. He started, jerked, turned around and found himself face-to-face with an old, wizened woman. She reached put/held out her gnarled hand to him and said saying, "Please." Peter dug into his pocket, found some coins and tossed them at her before rushing away.
    It this is the first instance of "alley" in your text, use "... a dark, narrow alley" instead.

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