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    She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Is this sentence OK?

    She is the person with whom I share my secrets, who I trust my secrets with, and with whom I often discuss private affairs.

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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    You can, but does it really need to be that long and complicated?

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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    I think the more complicated, the better.
    I have read lost of books, magazines and samples of writing and find that they all written in complex way. I want to be like those writers. I think if I write something simple, everyone thinks of me as an intermediate English learner. I love to be like advanced English learners, but I can't. Sometimes I get really exhausted because I always try to use complicated words and grammar rules

    Is it better and simpler?
    She is the person with whom I share my secrets. I also discuss private affairs with her because I trust her with my secrets.

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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    I think the more complicated, the better.
    No, that's not necessarily true, especially if you're a learner.


    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    I have read lots of books, magazines and samples of writing and find that they were all written in a complex way. I want to be like those writers. I think if I write something simple, everyone thinks of me as an intermediate English learner. I would love to be able to write like advanced English learners, but I can't. Sometimes I get really exhausted because I always try to use complicated words and grammar rules.
    I'm not sure why you think you wouldn't be able to write like advanced English learners. You just need to be patient and practice more (reading and writing).

    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    Is it better and simpler now?
    She is the person with whom I share my secrets. I also discuss my private affairs with her because I trust her with my secrets.
    It's much better now, but as an exercise, can you put it all into one shorter sentence?
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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    No, that's not necessarily true, especially if you're a learner.

    I'm not sure why you think you wouldn't be able to write like advanced English learners. You just need to be patient and practice more (reading and writing)
    Thanks teechar for correcting me.

    Because when I want to write or speak about a new topic I lack ideas. To solve this problem, I try to read lots of books related to the topic to help me to brainstorm. Finally, I can write and talk about that topic. However, when I want to start writing or speaking about something new, I am lacking in ideas again and I don’t have good vocabulary in my mind to use them in my new topics. This make me feel that I haven’t yet made any progress, and makes me really tired. Sometimes I get so exhausted and hopeless that I decide to give up the IELTS exam, but I can’t. I want to make my wishes and dreams come true in my life. I want to be an English teacher, my only dream in my life. I really LOVE English. Sometimes I think I fall in love with it. But, I often lose all of my hopes again, because I think I am not smart enough and I can’t never and nevet speak English fluently.
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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Is it better now?

    She is the person who I share and trust my secrets with, and I can discuss private affairs with her too.

    OR

    She is the person with whom I share and trust my secrets, and who I can discuss private affairs with too.
    Last edited by newkeenlearner; 27-Sep-2017 at 21:39.

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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    Thanks teechar for correcting me.

    Because When I want to write or speak about a new topic, I lack ideas. To solve/overcome this problem, I try to read lots of books related to the topic to help me (to) brainstorm. Finally, I Only then can I write and talk about that topic. However, when I want to start writing or speaking about something new, I am lacking in ideas again, and I donít have good vocabulary in my mind to use them in my for the new topics. This make me feel that I havenít yet made any progress and makes me really tired. Sometimes, I get so exhausted and hopeless that I decide to feel like giving up on the IELTS exam, but I canít. I want to make my wishes and dreams come true. in my life. I want to be an English teacher, my only dream in my life. I really LOVE English. Sometimes, I think I've fallen in love with it. But, I often lose all of my hopes again, because I think I am not smart enough and I canít ever [or can never] never and nevet speak English fluently.
    It's only natural to feel frustration from time to time. However, it's not useful to dwell on negative sentiments. The secret to success is to incorporate fun into the learning process. It never helps to push yourself too hard. You're doing well, so compliment yourself on your achievements and continue to build on your successes.

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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    Is it better now?
    She is the person who I share and trust my secrets with, and I can discuss private affairs with her too.

    OR

    She is the person with whom I share and trust my secrets, and who I can discuss private affairs with too.
    Those are okay, but let's go back to the one above.
    This is what I was thinking of:

    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    She is the person with whom I share my secrets . I also and discuss my private affairs with her because I trust her. with my secrets.

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    Re: She is the person with whom I share my secrets,

    Quote Originally Posted by newkeenlearner View Post
    She is the person with whom I share my secrets, who I trust my secrets with, and with whom I often discuss private affairs.
    Using with whom twice and who...with looks a little odd to me.

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