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    Since he was a teenager, Bob

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Since he was a teenager, Bob lived alone. He had taken care of everyday chores himself, and it never occurred to him to have a girlfriend. People thought he was odd, and told him he needed a woman, but he paid no heed to their advice.

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    Re: Since he was a teenager, Bob

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Ever since he was a teenager, Bob had lived alone. He had taken care of everyday chores himself, and it had never occurred to him to have a girlfriend. People thought he was odd [no comma] and told him he needed a woman, but he paid no heed. to their advice. ["Paying no heed" already tells us he didn't follow their advice. There's no need to mention it again.]
    I've made it grammatical but I don't like the style. Begin with Bob, who is the subject of the story.
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    Re: Since he was a teenager, Bob

    I will repeat my sentence after GoesStaion's corrections, just as an exercise.

    Bob had lived alone ever since he was a teenager. He had taken care of everyday chores himself, and it had never occurred to him to have a girlfriend. People thought he was odd and told him he needed a woman, but he paid no heed.

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    Re: Since he was a teenager, Bob

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I will repeat my sentence after GoesStaion's corrections, just as an exercise.

    Bob had lived alone ever since he was a teenager. He had taken care of everyday chores himself, and it had never occurred to him to have a girlfriend. People thought he was odd and told him he needed a woman, but he paid no heed.
    I think you could even dare to remove the final comma.
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    Re: Since he was a teenager, Bob

    I would leave that final comma in.

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    Re: Since he was a teenager, Bob

    Some might question the link between a girlfriend and chores.

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    Re: Since he was a teenager, Bob

    I forgot to mention why beginning Since he was a teenager doesn't work. The reader will understand the initial since in its other meaning, "because".
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