paragraph about Lincoln

[ZigZ4g]

Hello everyone


Is my answer correct to this task please?
4. Lincoln was born in Kentucky.
1. When Lincoln was eight years old, his father lost most of his land in Kentucky.
7. Lincoln's family moved to Indiana after his father's bankruptcy.
6. The first winter they spent in Indiana they lived in a house with only three walls; the fourth side was open for a fire.
2. Lincoln's mother died when he was nine years old.
3. When Lincoln was nine, his stepmother persuaded his father that Abraham should begin to go to school.
5. He started school, but it soon closed.

Task: Write a paragraph with information about Lincoln provided above. While making use of the ready-made sentences above, you may also need to add necessary transitional words or make any other necessary changes in order to turn out an effective paragraph.

My answer:

Lincoln was born in Kentucky. When he was eight years old, his father lost most of his land there. Lincoln's family moved to Indiana after his father's bankruptcy. The first winter that they spent in Indiana, they lived in a house with only three walls; the fourth side was open for a fire. Lincoln's mother died when he was nine years old. Soon after, his stepmother persuaded his father that Abraham should begin to go to school. However, the school closed not long after Lincoln's enrollment.


I tried to accentuate the changes I've made by emboldening them.

[Tarheel]

It looks good to me.

[emsr2d2]

ZigZ4g, when do you have to submit your homework to your teacher?

[ZigZ4g]

ZigZ4g, when do you have to submit your homework to your teacher?

Tomorrow.

[Tarheel]

[ZigZ4g]

Anything wrong here?

[emsr2d2]

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