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    Morning walk

    Hello,
    Sir, could you please pinpoint my mistakes in the following piece of writing?

    Morning walk in the garden to me is the best activity of the whole day. It is time when there is minimum of pollution as less traffic is plying on the roads which makes less smoke and noise coming out of engines of heavy vehicles around as compared with the later part of the day. During this brief part of the morning time the breeze is usually cool as no heat of sun as yet. The sun though is emerging in the East but still it is not as hot as it will get as the day goes on. The fragrance of beautiful flowers has surrounded the garden which makes the process of inhaling and exhaling for the walkers very enjoyable. Everybody in the garden is busy- Some are doing brisk walk, while others are doing exercise to keep themselves fit. Then there are people who are doing yoga to make their mind and body fit. Everything looks green- green tall trees and lush green grass. Morning time is indeed the best part of the day for those who like to come out of their bed early and go for a walk.

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    Re: Morning walk

    You have addressed your post to "Sir". Do you really want only the male members of the forum to help you?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Morning walk

    Sorry, I didn't mean it. Anyone could correct my piece of writing.
    Thanks

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    Re: Morning walk

    Morning walk in the garden to me is the best activity of the whole day.
    Can you add the missing word and move a couple of words?

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    Re: Morning walk

    Dear Tdol,
    I am sorry I could not get you as I have already submitted my draft and all I need is that my whole draft is corrected.
    thanks

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    Re: Morning walk

    If it is a submission, we cannot help.

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    Re: Morning walk

    No, no please do not get me wrong. I have submitted the draft in this forum only. I have not submitted anywhere else. In fact I wrote in only last night and submitted it in the morning in your forum. That's all.

    Hatim

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    Re: Morning walk

    What are you going to do with it when it's been corrected?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Morning walk

    Let me make some suggestions/corrections. This is the only place where I get paid to do that stuff. Oh wait! I don't get paid.

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    Re: Morning walk

    Dear, emsr2d2
    I am going to place on my record and every time I see the draft I will avoid the mistakes corrected by you. That's all.

    Hatim

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