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    I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Could someone please check the following essay for any mistakes? I appreciate it.


    I am an animal lover, especially dogs which are my most favourite animals. They have been some people’s only companies these days as well as (being) human’s best friends for thousands of years. A dog is the only thing on this earth that loves you more than he/it loves himself/itself. This means that they are so loyal and loving that they can make a really wonderful companion. It is also said that a pet dog can feel like a member of a family. People often show their love to their pet dogs in the same way as they do to their children, and the feeling is mutual. What I like the most about this animal is that it/he is always ready to offer its/his unconditional love to its/his owner. You know, even if you’ve been so busy that you haven’t had enough time to give your dog the attention it deserves, it’s still madly waiting for you to come home and welcome you warmly. When you’re feeling down and thinking no one loves you, you always have a canine partner to make you feel better and happier. They never judge and are always happy to see you return, whether you’ve been gone five hours or five minutes. Sometimes these animals may be trained and kept with the aim of helping disabled, lonely, elderly or very ill people or those suffering from blindness, in an attempt to meet such people’s everyday needs, such as opening/closing doors, picking up dropped items, emptying the washing machine, etc. People with dogs are shown to have had less heart problems as well because they get regular exercise from walking their pets. In addition, in terms of mental health, having a dog improves dog owner’s mood and alleviate stress which in turn means lowering blood pressure. However, you have to know how to deal with such animals. What I mean is that, they need constant supervision, attention and caring that includes walking, feeding and exercising them frequently, which means your devoting a great deal of time, effort and energy. I wish I could have one, but we have a strict rule regarding keeping pets, especially dogs where I live.
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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Quote Originally Posted by ambitious-girl View Post
    Could someone please check the following essay for any mistakes AND OFFER SUGGESTIONS/CORRECTIONS?

    Any questions?

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Say:

    I am an animal lover, and I especially like dogs.

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Try:

    For many people a dog is their only companion.

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Try:

    It is often said that a pet dog can seem like a member of the family.

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Perhaps:

    A dog is a source of unconditional love.

    I can't talk about feelings that animals have.

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Your dog is always glad to see you.

    (I know I said I can't talk about an animal's emotions, but I can't think of a better way to put it.)

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

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    People with dogs have fewer heart problems because they get regular exercise from walking their dogs. And they have less stress.

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    "...but we have a strict rule regarding keeping pets, especially dogs, where I live."

    Note the red comma. This is necessary. Firstly, "especially dogs" is an interpolation, a parenthesis: remove it and the sentence still makes sense without it. You enclose those within commas (or brackets). Secondly, it's not "especially dogs where I live" that is the problem. The problem where you live is pets - "especially dogs". There's a subtle difference.

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    Re: I am an animal lover (Dogs)

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Could someone please check the following essay for any mistakes AND OFFER SUGGESTIONS/CORRECTIONS?
    Any questions?
    What did you mean Tarheel?
    Are you trying to make fun of learners here?
    Thanks for correction, but am I forcing you to check my essay?
    Last night when I was exploring this forum ,I found that you seemed to be enjoying making fun of learners for questions they asked. Now I am sure about it.

    Besides, along with appreciating your help, I am sorry to say that I didn’t get any point from your correction. It is not well-organized at all. The way you did proofreading made me really confused. It is not considered as an essay correction too. In addition, I am sure there might be some serious mistakes like what Raymott noticed that you didn’t point.
    Last edited by ambitious-girl; 08-Oct-2017 at 04:36.
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