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    After a few months of happy marriage

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    After a few months of happy marriage between Frank and Lidia, a spate of arguments followed. He accused her of not knowing how to cook and that her meat was overcooked, while she countered that he should bring his mother, who could cook for him twenty four hours a day.

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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    I think it's fine.

    (Maybe they need a vacation. )

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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    There's a parallelism error: he accused her of not knowing how to cook/he accused her that her meat was overcooked.

    Try beginning with the spate of arguments. You'll lose a comma, making for a smoother opening sentence.
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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    I am not sure if I can write a correct sentence, but I will try.

    Frank and Lidia had a spate of arguments after a few months of a happy marriage. He accused her of not knowing how to cook and her meat being overcooked. She countered that he should bring in his mother, who could cook for him twenty four hours a day.

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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    The parallelism error is still there. The second sentence says, in part, He accused her of her meat being overcooked. That doesn't work.

    Hyphenate twenty-four.
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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    What about this version:

    He accused her of not knowing how to cook and of overcooking her meat.

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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    Isn't "overcooking the meat" a subset of "not knowing how to cook"?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    Barb_D,

    You are right. I could simply write this:

    He accused her of overcooking her meat.

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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    He accused her of not knowing how to cook, e.g. overcooking the meat.
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    Re: After a few months of happy marriage

    The meaning of the original is clear. Maybe it could be improved a little, but it's not terrible.

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