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    Proofreading request

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    Could you help me to check grammar in the following text?
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    "Retinopathy of prematurity (ROP) is an important and preventable cause of childhood blindness. For this reason, in VISION 2020 program initiated by the World Health Organization to eliminate avoidable blindness, the control of the disease was highlighted. As the survival rate of very low birth weight infant increase in developing countries, also including our country, due to improvement in neonatal care, the frequency of disease has increased. The basic strategy for prevention of blindness from ROP is to identify the patients requiring treatment by examining within certain protocol. In this process, which was also called “Screening program”, it is important to identify babies needing treatment as many as possible, while minimizing the number of examinations. In this respect, the risk group should be well defined and diagnosis, follow up and treatment process should be done in a standard protocol. In this review it was aimed to give information about the about the diagnosis, follow-up and treatment of ROP"

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Did you write that text yourself?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Yes, I wrote with the help of google translate.

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    Re: Proofreading request

    "Retinopathy of prematurity (ROP) is an important and preventable cause of childhood blindness. For this reason, in VISION 2020 program initiated by the World Health Organization to eliminate avoidable preventable blindness, the control of the disease was highlighted. As the survival rate of very low birth weight infant increases in developing countries alsoincluding our country, due to improvement in neo-natal care, the frequency of disease has increased. The basic strategy for the prevention of blindness from ROP is to identify the patients requiring treatment by examining them within according to a certain protocol. In this process, which was also called ascreening program”, it is important to identify as many babies needing treatment as many as possible, while minimizing the number of examinations. In this respect, the risk group should be well defined and diagnosis, follow-up and treatment process should be done in following a standard protocol. In This review it was aimed aims to give information about on the about the diagnosis, follow-up and treatment of ROP".
    May I know what language the above text was translated from?
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 14-Oct-2017 at 15:25. Reason: Fixed typo
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Quote Originally Posted by canerkara View Post
    Yes, I wrote with the help of Google Translate.
    Bear in mind that while Google Translate can be very useful for translating single words, it frequently makes a mess of longer pieces.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post


    May I know what language the above text was translated from?
    Thank you. I translate from Turkish

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Quote Originally Posted by canerkara View Post
    Thank you. I translate from Turkish
    Or:

    I translated it from Turkish to English.

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Did you write the original piece in Turkish?
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    Re: Proofreading request

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Did you write the original piece in Turkish?
    Yes, I wrote in Turkish, then tranlated to Engilish.

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    Re: Proofreading request

    Quote Originally Posted by canerkara View Post
    Hi
    Could you help me to check the grammar in the following text?
    Thank you.

    "Retinopathy of prematurity (ROP) is an important and preventable cause of childhood blindness. For this reason, in the VISION 2020 program, initiated by the World Health Organization to eliminate avoidable blindness, the control of the disease was highlighted. As the survival rate of very low birth-weight infants increases in developing countries, also including our country, due to improvements in neonatal care, the frequency of the disease has increased. The basic strategy for the prevention of blindness from ROP is to identify the patients requiring treatment by examining them within according to a certain protocol. In this process, which was also called “Screening program”, it is important to identify babies needing treatment as many quickly as possible, while minimizing the number of examinations. In this respect, the risk group should be well-defined, and diagnosis, follow-up and treatment process should be done in in line with a standard protocol. In This review it was aimed ​aims to give information about the about the diagnosis, follow-up and treatment of ROP."
    Quote Originally Posted by canerkara View Post
    Yes, I wrote it in Turkish, then translated it to English.
    See above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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