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    The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    1) The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    2) The condition of a patient has gone past the ability of the doctors of saving him.

    Please check my sentences.

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    Re: The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    Why make them so wordy?

    The patient's condition has become untreatable.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Why make them so wordy?

    The patient's condition has become untreatable.
    Could you please tell me about my sentences as well? I mean are they wrong?

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    Re: The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    #1 would be OK if you used "the", not "a". For this sentence to be uttered, the listener would already need to know which patient you're talking about.
    #2 would be OK if you used "the" and changed the end to "... the ability of doctors to save him".

    However, as I said, they're overly and unnecessarily wordy. You need to understand the difference between a grammatical sentence and a natural grammatical sentence.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    Tufguy, it is possible to compose a long, perfectly grammatical, yet entirely and completely - not to mention thoroughly and decisively - unnatural sentence; a sentence which, even though it does not violate a single, solitary rule of English grammar, is nevertheless so utterly convoluted as to be one hundred percent unlikely ever to be heard spoken by a native English speaker.

    Knowing how to do that is not a useful goal for an English learner.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: The condition of a patient has gone past the stage where it could be treated.

    Tufguy, would you use wordy sentences in your native language?
    I usually write concisely in my native language and try to do the same in English.
    I am not a teacher.

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