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    Linda sat at a dressing table

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Linda sat at a dressing table, rubbing off her eye shadow. Her husband lay in bed, giving her disapproving glances."I will never understand how women can spend so much time on such trivial things," he said. "Because you are not a woman," she retorted.

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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    Excellent!

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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    I'd use "removing", not "rubbing off". We usually remove makeup, regardless of where it is on the face or body. One can even buy a product called "makeup remover".
    I think her reply would be more grammatical as "That's because ..." but it's natural enough in casual English as you wrote it.

    (I couldn't agree more with her husband!)
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    In narrative writing, start a new paragraph for each different speaker's quoted text.

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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    I think her reply would be more grammatical as "That's because ..." but it's natural enough in casual English as you wrote it.
    It would also work fine without because.

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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    It would also work fine without because.
    Though not with "That's" but without "because".
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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Linda sat at a dressing table, rubbing off her eye shadow.
    Unless the bedroom was full of dressing tables, of which Linda happened to pick one at random, this sentence needs the definite article. Which dressing table?
    The one in the bedroom.
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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Linda sat at the dressing table, rubbing off her eye shadow. Her husband lay in bed, giving her disapproving glances."I will never understand how women can spend so much time on such trivial things," he said.

    "Because you are not a woman!" she retorted.
    As Ems suggested, you could say "removing" instead of "rubbing off".

    (Can you guess what I missed the first time?)

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    Re: Linda sat at a dressing table

    Quote Originally Posted by GoesStation View Post
    Unless the bedroom was full of dressing tables, of which Linda happened to pick one at random, this sentence needs the definite article. Which dressing table?
    The one in the bedroom.
    Good point. If she's in her own bedroom, I'd use "her dressing table".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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