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    When Ivan arrived in the US

    Would you please help me with my sentences and correct the mistakes?

    When Ivan arrived in the US for the first time, he found everything as twice as large, wide and heavy as in his homeland, from roads, buildings, beds, servings to people. He felt tiny and insignificant, like an ant lost in a maze.

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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    Lose the first as. The list of sizable things would read better like this: from the roads, buildings, beds, and servings to the people themselves.
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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    I am wondering why do we need "the". Do we speak about specific roads, buildings and people? Or is it because we are talking about American roads?

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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering why do we need "the". Do Are we speaking about specific roads, buildings and people? Or is it because we are talking about American roads?
    We're speaking of specific roads, buildings and people: the ones in the United States.
    Last edited by GoesStation; 29-Oct-2017 at 23:34. Reason: To strike out another word.
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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    How about using much instead of twice? Twice would not make me feel like an ant.

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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    How about using much instead of twice? Twice would not make me feel like an ant.
    That would give "... he found everything much as large as ...". Did you mean to suggest "much larger, wider and heavier than ..." rather than "twice as large, wide and heavy as ..."?
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 31-Oct-2017 at 11:41.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    I meant say "much larger, wider and heavier than..."

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    Re: When Ivan arrived in the US

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I meant to say "much larger, wider and heavier than..."
    Note my correction above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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