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    Red face Dream House

    Heyho!:)
    I have fall break now so I was wondering about develope my English skills, so I wrote a journal anouz my dream house. I donít know if itís correct or not so I decided to show it to you:) Iím looking forward to see your corrections. Thank you very much!
    Jazz

    Here is my essay:
    I have never been thinking about my dream house, because I want to be a full time traveler and live in different houses, hostels, maybe in tents. But if I need to choose I would pick an Italian style, colorful house with so called clotheslines.
    For the first: I would like it to be on a hill, in a big city or in a small village, for example in Kaş, Turkey, in Oia, Greece, in Shirakawa, Japan or on a border of two countries. The colours of the hard-bricked walls would be goldenrod, olive and salmon. From inside I want the colours be a little bit lighter like aquamarine and yellowfin, becausethen the rooms would seem to be much more bigger. I love watching sunsets and sunrises, thatís why I would have giant windows with light curtains. I would have a big garden which I would grow vegetables and flowers in.
    From inside: the house would have at least two floors. On the first fllor thereíd be my American kitchen with the living room, one bathroom, the guestrooms with wardrobes and a gym with a treadmill and a stationary bicycle. On the second there would be an artist hall with my musical instruments and painting supplies, three bedrooms and a bathroom. When youíre going to the 2nd floor you would need to take the stairs behind a secret door. On the walls there would be a lot of family photos amd paintings by Van Gogh and me. I would like to have a library on the second which would is larger than any other rooms. The library opens to the big balcony. There would be beautiful view to the town amd of course fresh air because of the mountains.

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    Re: Dream House

    Say:

    I am on fall break now, so I am taking the time to develop my English skills. I have written an essay about my dream house, and I am looking forward to your corrections.

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    Re: Dream House

    Quote Originally Posted by jazizi.zi View Post
    Heyho Hello! :)
    I have fall break now so and I was wondering thinking about developing my English skills, so I wrote a journal an essay anouz about my dream house. I don’t know if it’s correct or not so I decided to show it to you. :) I’m looking forward to seeing your corrections. Thank you very much!
    Jazz

    Here is my essay:

    I have never been thinking thought about my dream house (no comma here) because I want to be a full time traveler and live in different houses, hostels, maybe even in tents. But However, if I needed to choose, I would pick an Italian-style, colorful house with so called clotheslines. I don't know what the underlined part means.

    For the first: I would like it to be on a hill, in a big city or in a small village, for example in Kaş, Turkey, in Oia, Greece, in Shirakawa, Japan or on a the border of between two countries. The colours of the hard-bricked walls would be goldenrod (I don't think most people would know what colour that is), olive and salmon. From On the inside, I want the colours be a little bit lighter, like aquamarine and yellowfin (again, I don't think most people know what colour that is), because then the rooms would seem to be much more bigger. I love watching sunsets and sunrises, that’s why I would have giant windows with light curtains. I would have a big garden, in which I would grow vegetables and flowers. in.

    From inside: The house would have at least two floors. On the first fllor floor, there’d there would be my an American kitchen (what is an "American kitchen"?) with and the living room, one bathroom, the guestrooms, with wardrobes and a gym with a treadmill and a stationary bicycle. On the second floor, there would be an artist hall (I don't know what that is) with my musical instruments and painting supplies, three bedrooms and a bathroom. When you’re going to

    To reach the 2nd second floor, you would need to take the stairs, which would be hidden behind a secret door. On the walls there would be a lot of family photos amd and paintings by Van Gogh and by me. On the second floor, I would also like to have a library on the second, which would is be larger than any the other rooms. The library would opens open onto the a big balcony. There would be beautiful views to the town amd and, of course, there would be a lot of fresh air because of the house's proximity to the mountains.
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