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    Bea stared at herself in the mirror

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Bea stared at herself in the mirror and was disappointed by her looks. More wrinkles covered her face, while dark rings hung under her tired eyes. The night shift was putting years on her. She had to find another job or she risked of becoming prematurely old.

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    Re: Bea stared at herself in the mirror

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    Bea stared at herself in the mirror and was disappointed by/with her looks what she saw. More (more than what?) wrinkles covered her face, while dark rings hung under her tired eyes. The night shift was putting years on her. She had to find another job or she risked of becoming prematurely old.
    See above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Bea stared at herself in the mirror

    Would it be OK if I write this:

    More wrinkles than ever covered her face..

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    Re: Bea stared at herself in the mirror

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would it be OK if I write this?

    More wrinkles than ever covered her face ...
    That would be OK.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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