[Essay] Short essay about music

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I don’t have a favourite type of music. I listen a lot of different genres based on my emotional mood. I think that is wrong thinking that a genre is better than one other, but there are genres more suitable to different situation than other. There are songs with a touching text but absolutely inappropriate to dance. And songs with which you can’t avoid dance, don’t matter where you are, but with a dull text.
Music is always present in our life since we were born and mark an infinite number of moments, from saddest to happiest. Sometimes our musical choices are influenced from friends or from family and always from the radio stations who transmit always the same genre. I like to go to youtube to discover new artists or find songs know less. And when I found a song that I love that song become special, and I feel like I found an hidden pearl.
 

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I don’t have a favourite type of music. I listen a lot of different genres based on my mood. I think it is wrong to say that one genre is better than another, but there are genres more suitable than others depending on the situation. There are songs with a touching text but absolutely inappropriate for dancing to And songs that move you to dance, no matter where you are, but with a dull text.

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Music is always present in our lives since birth, and it marks an infinite number of moments, from saddest to happiest. Sometimes our musical choices are influenced by friends or family and always by radio stations that always play the same genre. I like to go to youtube to discover new artists or find new songs. And when I find a song that I love that song becomes special, and I feel like I found a hidden pearl.

I think You Tube is supposed to be capitalized.
 
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I realized sentences more simple are better. At least at the beginning.

Your supposition about You Tube are right certainly.
 
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It is true that simpler sentences often have more punch to them.

I made two changes to post #3. Can you find them?
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You're right about the capitalisation but it's actually written as one word - YouTube.
 

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Mhhh.. maybe one is about this sentence "Music is always present in our lives since birth...". I think it is different from before but I'm not so sure!
There was no space between marks and an at this point "and it marks an".
Please enlighten me :)
 
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I thought you might have missed them. I put in a space where one was needed, and I changed an hidden pearl to a hidden pearl.

The "h" in "hidden" is aspirated, so you need to use "a" and not "an" there.

a house
a hope
a horse
a horn

an honor
an hour
 

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I realized sentences more simple are better. At least at the beginning.

Not at the beginning. Always.

Your supposition about You Tube is certainly right (or: is certain to be right).

For reasons beyond my abilities to divine, there's no space between You and Tube. It's YouTube.
 

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The "h" in "hidden" is aspirated, so you need to use "a" and not "an" there.

a house
a hope
a horse
a horn

an honor
an hour

I really didn't see that. Thanks for clarifying :)

And thank you Charlie for the corrections.

I think we could change the title in "How to write YouTube in an essay" haha
 
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