[Grammar] Expressing his condolences to all of the earthquake-stricken people, he said ......

[Flogger]

Hello,

would you please proof read the following line?

Expressing his condolences to all of the earthquake-stricken people, he said: “We should thank all the people of the country because they all came and helped, but we must know that today the earthquake-stricken need plastic more than anything else to be protected from the rain.

Thank you in advance.

 

[emsr2d2]

Did you write that sentence, Flogger?

 

[Tarheel]

Hello,

Would you please proofread the following line?

Please note corrections, especially capitalization.

 

[Flogger]

Did you write that sentence, Flogger?

Yes. Would you please proofread it?

 

[Tarheel]

Expressing his condolences to all of the earthquake-stricken people, he said: “We should thank all the people of the country because they all came and helped, but we need to be aware that today the earthquake-stricken more than anything else need plastic to protect them from the rain.

 

[Tarheel]

You might want to use a different word (other than "protect"), but that's OK.

 

[Flogger]

Expressing his condolences to all of the earthquake-stricken people, he said: “We should thank all the people of the country because they all came and helped, but we need to be aware that today the earthquake-stricken more than anything else need plastic to protect them from the rain.

I guess it should be "themselves". what do you think?

 

[Tarheel]

I guess it should be "themselves". What do you think?

I don't think so, but I have an idea. Give me a minute or two.

 

[Tarheel]

Expressing his condolences to all of the earthquake-stricken people, he said: “We should thank all the people of the country because they all came and helped, but we need to be aware that today more than anything else the earthquake-stricken need plastic for protection from the rain.

You can thank me now.