lishen3
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Hi lovely people, I want to kindly ask you to proofread my motivation letter and help me correct and rephrase incorrectly written sentences. I am also looking to cut it into 300 words, it would be much appreciated if you could give me advice on the cutting. Thank you in advance.
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply to your Master program in Finance. Since I started working for a PE firm, I found out that this is the industry I want to be in and set my career goal to co-found a social PE company. I have made a lot of preparation for it and I believe that, with a Master's degree from UvA, I can achieve a higher success.
I remember when I first learned about the PE industry through an alumni forum, I was interested because I would love to take a part in various emerging businesses. I, therefore, undertook an internship in a top PE firm, where I found myself very enjoyable learning to play the ‘detective game’ of due diligence and exploring the art of building valuation models. But the “This is what I want to do with my career!” moment happened when I found out that many innovative start-ups that are now bringing revolutionary changes to our society are funded and managed by my firm. I have always been looking to have a career that improves people's lives while having good profitability, and the PE industry caters my appetite just perfectly. So, I was inspired to make a long-term plan: to co-found a PE company that contributes to the society by investing in firms with a social mission and guiding them towards success. To achieve that plan, I expect to work as an analyst in a PE investment company after completing the graduate program so as to get experience and extended my social network.
I believe the MSc Finance program of UvA is perfect for me to study financial knowledge in a more in-depth and systematic way before realising my dream. I am particularly interested in the courses Advanced Corporate Finance and Valuation because I have found them essential for me to flexibly navigate financial scenarios at work. Besides, the curriculum is quite parallel to my ambitions as I want to improve myself in interpreting financial statements, corporate governance and financial modelling. More exciting, UvA offers an international learning environment where I can gain the advantage to learn to cooperate with people from different backgrounds.
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely yours
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply to your Master program in Finance. Since I started working for a PE firm, I found out that this is the industry I want to be in and set my career goal to co-found a social PE company. I have made a lot of preparation for it and I believe that, with a Master's degree from UvA, I can achieve a higher success.
I remember when I first learned about the PE industry through an alumni forum, I was interested because I would love to take a part in various emerging businesses. I, therefore, undertook an internship in a top PE firm, where I found myself very enjoyable learning to play the ‘detective game’ of due diligence and exploring the art of building valuation models. But the “This is what I want to do with my career!” moment happened when I found out that many innovative start-ups that are now bringing revolutionary changes to our society are funded and managed by my firm. I have always been looking to have a career that improves people's lives while having good profitability, and the PE industry caters my appetite just perfectly. So, I was inspired to make a long-term plan: to co-found a PE company that contributes to the society by investing in firms with a social mission and guiding them towards success. To achieve that plan, I expect to work as an analyst in a PE investment company after completing the graduate program so as to get experience and extended my social network.
I believe the MSc Finance program of UvA is perfect for me to study financial knowledge in a more in-depth and systematic way before realising my dream. I am particularly interested in the courses Advanced Corporate Finance and Valuation because I have found them essential for me to flexibly navigate financial scenarios at work. Besides, the curriculum is quite parallel to my ambitions as I want to improve myself in interpreting financial statements, corporate governance and financial modelling. More exciting, UvA offers an international learning environment where I can gain the advantage to learn to cooperate with people from different backgrounds.
Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.
Sincerely yours
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