I am writing opening statement for my resume.
Can you kindly proofread?
"I engage in consulting and research on how to design and build processes for organizations learning and growth."
Please see the text in bold above.
Is "how to" here correct? OR should I take out "how to" and rather say ~ designing and buildingprocesses...
Last edited by Rover_KE; 11-Jan-2018 at 00:17. Reason: deleting duplicate text
'How to' is fine, though I don't know how one can design and build processes for organizations learning and growth. It doesn't mean much to me. Where did you find this?
You can use the -ing forms, but the sentence would have a different meaning
Yes, the meaning would be slightly different. I think it would be fine, but you should be the judge. "I consult and research designing and building processes" would be more concise. (Although there must be a way to avoid processes.)Originally Posted by 1Stat
I'm puzzled by "organizations learning and growing." You might mean:
- oranizations' learning and growth.
- organizational learning and growth.
- organizations that are learning and growing.
- organizational development.
But even with one of those changes, it's still not clear what your consulting and research are about or whom they're for. Can you make your opening sentence more clear and concise? For example:
- I consult and do reseach on organizational learning and growth. This includes . . .
Last edited by Charlie Bernstein; 12-Jan-2018 at 17:01.
I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.
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