[Grammar] There are a lot of things that can affect besides university diploma

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AmurRa

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There are a lot of things that can affect besides university diploma to your future: your upbringing (what valuable things you get from your parents); then how charismatic you are; do you able to defend your ideas, thoughts; the environment that you are living in. These imperceptible things that I listed above are playing an important role to me. In addition to these points, studying the field which I highly interested in two famous multilingual cities that I choose: Sydney and Melbourne. It’s exciting to me to study in highly respected universities with young fresh minded people from around the world. When I will have relationships with classmates and professors not just only throughout the course but afterward. The significant remark is I will have experience working in a team with foreign students: swapping ideas, thoughts how to solve the problem in given topics. Besides discussing varies topics will with students inside/outside, professors will improve my communicating skills, which I have a lack of this especially in front of the audience. So practicing this in seminars I will have big improvement which is sure will need any specialization I will work. And an increase of my cultural awareness; improve my foreign language proficiency; practicing in internships will strengthen my knowledge and analytical skills, so even when I will start my career in any organizations I will have a foundation and not be lost.
 
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