Information request email ‎

[yazan 1]

Hello ‎ IÂ’m new here in this great community ,‎ I am facing a small (not very small) problem in letter writing, so IÂ’ll be here more often.‎ I wish if you could give me some tips, and correct my writings and my emails into the right way.‎ This is an email about requesting information about a machine i wish if you could take a look on it . " Dear Mr My name is Yazan , IÂ’m an Engineer , Currently IÂ’m doing my master degree in NC University.‎ My main area of study is the Electrical components of the machinery ,‎ And recently IÂ’m working on a seminar about the Sensors in Machinery,‎ And one of the machines that IÂ’m going to talk about is your machine kl252 .‎ I wonder if you can provide me with respectable information about the sensors system in the machine Thank you for your assistance.‎ Cordially,‎ Yazan "

[emsr2d2]

Hello. ‎IÂ’m I'm new here in this great community. I am facing a small (actually, it's not very small) problem in letter writing, so IÂ’ll I'll be here more often.‎

I wish if you could hope you can give me some tips, and correct my writings and my emails. into the right way.‎

This is an email about requesting information about a machine. I wish if hope you could can take a look on at it.

Dear Mr [surname]

My name is Yazan and IÂ’m I'm an engineer. Currently, IÂ’m I'm doing my masters degree in at NC University.‎ My main area of study is the electrical components of the machinery,‎ and recently IÂ’m I've been working on a seminar about the sensors in machinery.‎ And One of the machines that IÂ’m going I want to talk about is your machine, the KL252.‎

I wonder if you can could provide me with respectable reliable information about the sensors system in the machine.

Thank you for your assistance.‎

Cordially Yours sincerely,‎

Yazan

Welcome to the forum.

Please see my corrections above. You seem to have a problem with creating an apostrophe with your keyboard.

It is important to follow these rules of written English at all times:

- Start every sentence with a capital letter.
- End every sentence with one appropriate punctuation mark (we don't end sentences with a comma).
- Always capitalise the word "I".
- Don't put a space before a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
- Always put a space after a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.

[yazan 1]

Thank you very much teacher.
I will try my best to follow these rules.