A Malay Movie, Badang

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Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

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A male college student is often bullied by friends because of his gentle nature but actually has extraordinary power. His mother died due to being hit by criminals who came to ask money for protection. With his extraordinary power, the young man was looking for a mastermind in charge of his mother's death. With the help of his best friend and girlfriend, he managed to beat the bandits, thus defending the death of his mother.

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When a young college student loss his mother, with the help of his friends he is looking for a mastermind in charge of his mother's death.
 

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Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

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A [STRIKE]male[/STRIKE] college student is often bullied by friends (Are they bullies or friends? It's unlikely that they're both) because of his gentle nature but actually he has an extraordinary power. His mother [STRIKE]died due to being hit[/STRIKE] was killed by criminals who came to [STRIKE]ask[/STRIKE] demand protection money. [STRIKE]for protection.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]With[/STRIKE] Using his extraordinary power, the young man was looking for [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] the mastermind [STRIKE]in charge of[/STRIKE] who ordered/caused his mother's death. With the help of his best friend and his girlfriend, he managed to beat the bandits, thus [STRIKE]defending[/STRIKE] avenging the death of his mother.

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When a young college student [STRIKE]loss[/STRIKE] loses his mother, with the help of his friends he [STRIKE]is looking[/STRIKE] searches for [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] the mastermind [STRIKE]in charge of[/STRIKE] who ordered/caused his mother's death.

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Well, they're not great friends then!
 

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Yeah, I think Asian countries are very famous in school bullying!
 

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School bullying is (probably) common everywhere in the world but I still wouldn't expect anyone who is being bullied to call those bullies his/her friends.
 
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