Motivation Letter for International Business & Management

[KelThuzad]

This has been asked from the university:

1. Describe and discuss your specific interests and talents that have contributed to your decision to pursue a Master degree in International Business and Management at Osnabrück University of Applied Sciences.
2. Which professional goals do you have? Where do you see yourself in your career ten years after completing your Master's degree? Here, you may want to consider the choice of a specialisation and possible combination of electives in the Master program to round up your argumentation.
3. Looking back at your CV and your previous studies: Which skills and methods you acquired do you consider most advantageous for successfully studying in this Master program? You may want to underline your statements with examples from your personal experiences made in your studies, your work, time spent abroad or voluntary work or from any other experience you find worth mentioning in this context.

And this was my Motivation's Letter, Teechar or whoever can help, I would be grateful if you check the grammar and the letter's context.





Dear Admissions,

I write to express my motivation to apply for the master’s programme of "International Business and Management" for the upcoming late September 2018’s winter semester.
Currently studying my last semester, expecting to have a hold of my Bachelor degree by August, having ranked in the top 10 students, (top 1 as male) in the first year
This flourished my desire of thriving onto better academic goals in Hochschule Osnabrück, because of the nature of this particular program, International students that account for 35-40% of the program. Through the practical oriented lectures along with different cultured colleagues.
The open minded global environment in the university’s program along with having a lot of multinational friends including Germans, whom I met through gaming platforms and further on social media, I can see myself as a member of this outstanding multicultural community seeking innovation and new methods.
Starting with the humble work of a Traffic Officer then with my studies and gained skills that I believe can be utilized, by the next 10 years into being on the right track for being an Airport manager. These are the reasons I would like to choose the specialization of International Management, a potential electives of Innovation and Transformation, Consulting in English and Digitalization in Society when I become fluent in German.
My interest in having the necessary managing and knowledge skills have derived from my internships, I have always had ideas on how to improve the workplace and reduce the amount of delays that occurred with customers and passengers during my enriched experience, at the airport internship, where I interacted with tens of different nationalities every day. There I was very convinced of the impact of a professional manager and the required ability to run everything smooth in such a sensitive place.

Since Globalization is the current world meta, pursuing a career in international business/management became my goal, hence, My bachelor studies “Tourism” sector lacked the necessary business and management skills to help retain the healthy status of the industry. As I had many researches and field visits to several tourism/tourist places during my bachelor.
Speaking with tourists in the perspective of a potential manager did improve my vision into/onto how to manage the industry in a physical way in addition to being the organizer in some other experiences in a semi-digital way.
When I had such responsibilities to run tournaments and my trainings at the airport truly enriched me on how to act in hard situations, differentiating between social life and business life, and coming out with the best outcome from the stressful situations that may occur, some of these things made me prove to myself that it’s not a fluke but rather passion and excitement.
Thank you for considering my application.
Yours Truly,
XXX XXX

[teechar]

This has been asked from by the university:
And this was my Motivation's Letter,

Have you already sent it. If not, when is the deadline?

I would be grateful if you check the grammar and the letter's context.

What do you mean by "the letter's context"? In what way can we help with that?

[KelThuzad]

Have you already sent it. If not, when is the deadline?

It's not sent yet, I meant this was my last edited version of the Motivation letter. sorry :) The deadline is 30 April but I live in a country outside the EU and I need to send the documents by this week to make sure it arrives on time.

What do you mean by "the letter's context"? In what way can we help with that?

The letter is professional enough, and grammatically correct(no mistakes), punctuations (I notice I have many but I struggle a bit with fixing them)..etc?

[teechar]

Dear Admissions,

I am writing to express my motivation to apply for the Master programme of International Business and Management programme for the upcoming late September 2018 winter semester.

I am currently studying my in the last semester , expecting to have a hold of my bachelor's degree, and I expect to graduate by in August, having ranked in the top 10 students, (top 1 as male) in the first year.

This flourished my desire of thriving onto better I have consistently endeavoured to improve my academic goals in performance at Hochschule Osnabrück, because of the nature of this particular program, where international students that account for 35-40% of the program. Through the practical oriented lectures along with different cultured colleagues.

Given the open-minded global environment in at the university, program along with having a lot of multinational my interest in making friends from various cultural backgrounds, including Germans, whom I met through gaming platforms and further on social media, I can see myself as a member of this outstanding multicultural community, seeking innovation and new discoveries. methods.

Starting with the humble work of a Traffic Officer then with my studies and gained skills that I believe can be utilized, by the next 10 years into being on the right track for being an Airport manager. These are the reasons I would like to choose the specialization of International Management, and potentially the electives of Innovation and Transformation, Consulting in English and Digitalization in Society when I become fluent in German.

My interest in having the necessary managing and management knowledge and skills have derived stem from my internships. I have always had ideas on about how to improve the workplace and reduce the amount of delays that occurred with inconvenience customers and passengers, during my enriched experience, during my internship at the airport, internship, where I interacted with tens of different nationalities every day. There, I was very convinced of the impact of a professional manager can have and the required ability to run everything smoothly in such a sensitive place.

Since globalization is the current world meta, pursuing a career in international business/management became my goal, hence, My bachelor studies “Tourism” sector lacked the necessary business and management skills to help retain the healthy status of the industry. As I had many researches and field visits to several tourism/tourist places during my bachelor.

Speaking with tourists in the perspective of a potential manager did improve my vision into/onto how to manage the industry in a physical way in addition to being the organizer in some other experiences in a semi-digital way.

When I had such responsibilities to run tournaments and my trainings at the airport truly enriched me on how to act in hard situations, differentiating between social life and business life, and coming out with the best outcome from the stressful situations that may occur, some of these things made me prove to myself that it’s not a fluke but rather passion and excitement.

Thank you for considering my application.

Yours Truly,

XXX XXX

I don't understand the underlined parts, and so I have not corrected the last paragraph. I suggest you rewrite the underlined text in clear and simple language.