I need help with my essay

[Jawad Hassan]

My Father

An important person in my life is my father.He is my everything.He is my hero.My father has a great personality and attitude.

First of all he provides me with all my needs.For example, money, education, necessary and luxuries. I appreciate his kindness and believe in me. It would take a life time to explain every single detail.

Secondly,he teaches me "the ways"to be a better person and teaches me to be a better citizen in my life.He speaks of the ways of life that should be the good deeds that shall be done, from right to wrong and life lectures and lessons.

That is the way I see my father.No one is complete, but my father is my role model. I wish everyone has great relations with their fathers such as me.

 

[teechar]

Hello Jawad, and welcome to the forum.
Is that homework?

 

[Jawad Hassan]

Hi ,and thank you for welcoming me.

No ,It is my second exam.

 

[teechar]

Hi, and thank you for welcoming me.

No, it is my second exam.

Do you mean second assignment?
If so, have you submitted to your teacher?

 

[Jawad Hassan]

No not yet .
He will see it here and I need too know if my essay is correct?

 

[Jawad Hassan]

Do you mean second assignment?
If so, have you submitted to your teacher?

Yes, it is second assignment.

 

[emsr2d2]

Are you suggesting that your teacher is a member of Using English and is going to mark your essays by reading them here?

 

[teechar]

He will see it here

Is that good or bad?

 

[Jawad Hassan]

Are you suggesting that your teacher is a member of Using English and is going to mark your essays by reading them here?

Yes , just this one.

 

[Jawad Hassan]

Is that good or bad?

It is good actually.

 

[emsr2d2]

Jawad Hassan, that is very unusual. Please ask your teacher to write a post in the "Teaching English" section confirming that he is teaching a student on this forum and that he is happy for you to get help with your essay before he sees it.

 

[Jawad Hassan]

Jawad Hassan, that is very unusual. Please ask your teacher to write a post in the "Teaching English" section confirming that he is teaching a student on this forum and that he is happy for you to get help with your essay before he sees it.

Sorry I can't ,but I will try to tell him.

 

[emsr2d2]

Well, in the meantime, I am closing this thread. You have told us that this is an essay that will be marked or graded. We don't help with homework or with assignments no matter where the teacher is going to read them. Your teacher has no interest in seeing an essay that has already been corrected by outsiders. He needs to see your work so that he can work out where your strengths and weaknesses are. You can send the link to this thread to your teacher so he can see what has happened so far.