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  1. Junior Member
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    #1

    Follow-Up Letter

    I will be grateful If you can correct my mistakes in my follow-up letter.

    ''Dear Sir/Madam,

    Thank you for taking the time to speak with me on Skype about your internship programme. It was great to meet with you.
    I am very exited about the opportunity to do an internship at Tamboli Castings. I strongly believe that it would enrich my future studies and strengthen my career prospects.

    I want to improve myself in mechanical design, manufacturing and industrial automation. Your list of offered internship programmes includes a programme which would satisfy my expectations. I have good knowledge of Solidworks, AutoCad and 3dsmax, and I would like to enhance my design and manufacturing skills by taking part in design and construction of industrial machines for the investment casting process.

    I have also developed an interest in automation and control. I believe that it is crucial to build a safer, more comfortable, efficient and sustainable future. This includes making everything smarter - from a simple device to our living environment. Making things smarter has always fascinated me, and I appreciate how smart technology is essential to the world.
    So, I am also studying electronic engineering to create a sufficient thereotical bacground in automation and control.

    My goal is to develop smarter machines and systems to improve efficiency and safety especially for factories.
    So, I think that your offered internship programme would give me an opportunity to get better in design, manufacturing and gain some experience. I also would like to observe the life in India, see a new culture and meet new people.

    In brief, I would value the opportunity of being part of your internship programme. I am sure that it contributes a lot to me.
    I am looking forward to hearing from you your final decision about the internship.

    Yours faithfully,

    Erbab''

    Thank you for your help!

  2. VIP Member
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      • Chinese
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      • Malaysia
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      • Malaysia

    • Join Date: Apr 2014
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    #2

    Re: Follow-Up Letter

    Quote Originally Posted by Erbab View Post
    I will be grateful If you can correct my mistakes in my follow-up letter to follow up on my application for internship.

    ''Dear Sir/Madam,

    Re: Internship


    Thank you for taking the time to speak with me on Skype about your internship programme. It was great to meet with you meeting/to have met you. I am very excited about the opportunity to do an internship at Tamboli Castings. I strongly believe that it would enrich my future studies experience and strengthen my career prospects.

    I want to improve myself in mechanical design, manufacturing and industrial automation. Your list of offered internship programmes includes a programme which would satisfy my expectations. I have a good knowledge of Solidworks, AutoCad and 3dsmax, and I would like to enhance my design and manufacturing skills by taking part in design and construction of industrial machines for the investment(are you sure of this word?) casting process.

    I have also developed an interest in automation and control. I believe that it is crucial to build a safer, more comfortable, efficient and sustainable future. This includes making everything smarter - from a simple device to our living environment. Making things smarter has always fascinated me, and I appreciate how smart technology is essential to the world. So, I am also studying electronic engineering to create acquire a sufficient theoretical background in automation and control.

    My goal is to develop smarter machines and systems to improve efficiency and safety, especially for factories. So, I think that your offered the internship programme you offer would give me an opportunity to get better in design, manufacturing and gain some experience. I also would like to observe the life in India, see experience a new culture and meet new people.

    In brief, I would value the opportunity of being part of your internship programme. I am sure that it would contributes a lot to me my experience. I am looking forward to hearing from you your final decision about the internship.

    Yours faithfully,

    Erbab''

    Thank you for your help!
    See above. Do not start a sentence on a separate line in the same paragraph.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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