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    Please correct below letter about lost item.

    Can Someone please correct the below letter and even add enhanced vocabulary where ever possible.

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    This letter is in reference to a lost of expensive personal item in Bombay express train.

    I was travelling in Bombay Express train departing from Rajkot and arriving at Bombay on Nov 11th 2018. I boarded the train at bogie number S8 and seat number 45. Unfortunately I lost my cell phone in train.

    Cell Phone was from apple manufacturing company of model iphone7. It is pink in color embedded in pink color case which has a label named "SaharaCase" at the bottom.I connected my phone to charger and placed on cell holder. Since I had to off board the train very early in the morning I forgot to take the phone from the stand.

    I would really appreciate if you can look for the item. Please let me know if you have any additional concerns about the item. I am reachable at phone number XXXXX890.Looking forward to hearing from you.

    Yours faithfully,
    khushi shah
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 22-Nov-2018 at 08:51. Reason: disguising phone number

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    Re: Please correct below letter about lost item.

    Quote Originally Posted by happykhushishah View Post
    Can Someone please correct the below letter below and even add enhanced vocabulary wherever possible?

    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am writing with regard to This letter is in reference to a lost of an expensive personal item which I lost while travelling in on an Bombay express train bound for Bombay.

    I was travelling in Bombay Express on the express train departing from Rajkot and arriving at to Bombay on Nov 11th 2018. I boarded the train at bogie was on car number S8, and my seat number was 45. Unfortunately, I lost my cell phone in on that train.

    Cell Phone was from apple manufacturing company of model It was an iPhone7, . It is pink in color embedded in a pink color case which has a label named "SaharaCase" at the bottom. I connected my phone to the charger and placed it on my cell holder. Since I had to off board alight from the train very early in the morning, I forgot to take the phone from the stand.

    I would really appreciate it if you can look for help me find my phone. the item. Please let me know if you have any additional concerns about the anyone has handed in such an item. I am reachable at phone number XXXXX890.

    Looking forward to hearing from you.

    Yours faithfully,

    khushi shah
    Hello Kushi, and welcome to the forum.
    I hope you can find your phone.

    By the way, isn't it Mumbai nowadays instead of Bombay?
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 25-Nov-2018 at 18:31. Reason: Fixed typo

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    #3

    Re: Please correct below letter about lost item.

    Quote Originally Posted by happykhushishah View Post
    It is pink in color embedded and is in a pink color case which has with a label named marked/reading "SaharaCase" at the bottom.
    Note my corrections to one specific sentence. My corrections differ a bit from teechar's.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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