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Please make Grammar corrections on my paragraph below!

You are probably asleep right now or maybe tossing and turning in your bed. Life brings us down sometimes, everything seems empty, tasteless even the brightest light, sun seems so dim and lifeless. Only During these dark times we can find the real light. We can ignore our feelings of emptiness by distracting ourselves through any temporary means but in no time those feelings hit us again and the cycle goes on and on until and unless we take our time to identify the issue, accept it and try finding ways to fix it with what it can and should be fixed. Humans have natural needs and every aspect of us has it's own food if you may call it. And if we do not replenish it with which It should be replenished it craves it. And this craving sensation gives us the feeling of emptiness. Sometimes we falsely take wrong means to satisfy our cravings and other times we don't even recognise what our souls are really screaming for. Human company can give us sense of security, care and love but we are complete only when we are connected to our God. He is the only one who can be with us all the time. Our souls need him and his remembrance. Gratefulness is one way to feel rich, and the only way we can be grateful is when we contemplate and realize God's favours and gifts that we take for granted or almost never recognize or acknowledge them.
 

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Please make Grammar corrections on my paragraph below!

You are probably asleep right now or maybe tossing and turning in your bed. [Oops! If we're asleep right now then we're not reading this. Rephrase.] Life brings us down sometimes, everything seems empty and tasteless, even the brightest light. The sun seems so dim and lifeless. Only during these dark times we can find the real light. We can ignore our feelings of emptiness by distracting ourselves through any temporary means, but in no time those feelings hit us again and the cycle goes on and on until and unless we take our time to identify the issue, accept it, and try finding ways to fix it [Delete: with what it can and should be fixed].

[New paragraph] Humans have natural needs, and every aspect of us has its own food, you might say. And if we do not replenish it with what it needs, it craves it. And this craving sensation gives us the feeling of emptiness. Sometimes we falsely use the wrong means to satisfy our cravings, and other times we don't even recognise what our souls are really screaming for. Human company can give us a sense of security, care, and love, but we are complete only when we are connected to our God. He is the only one who can be with us all the time. Our souls need him and his remembrance. Gratefulness is one way to feel rich, and the only way we can be grateful is when we contemplate and realize God's favours and gifts that we take for granted or almost never recognize or acknowledge [Delete: them].
Use commas to separate the parts of compound sentences.
 
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