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    Could someone please improve this Sentence for me?

    HR officer Email to me tomorrow I will meet Ms. Cavin She is CEO at Engineering company Please prepare yourself.

    I think should prepare follows
    1. Can I Introduce myself follows that word :my answer is : My name is mooyong I have 11 years experiences on Electrical system, Currently I'm a Assistant Project Manager at technical service Division

    2. Where is your work and what are you do : my answer is :Currently I work at Bangkok for site MENGTHAI LERNING CENTER Building. This project we supply and installation 3 System : mechanical system Electrical system and Plumping system

    3. What is your Gold : my answer is :My gold for this year is Completed MENGTHAI LERNING CENTER Building, There is the first Project that I do whole System, In previously I usually do the renovation work that a some part of the system.

    4. Technology in Future : my answer is : In future An Automation system and 3D Drawing will involved to MEP system more than today for reduced time and cost for MEP Work.
    That why we have BIM Division and Engineering Division
    5. What did you like when you training at hongkok : My answer is : I very like your country it very clan and safety for living and I very like the Hongkong transportation it easy and ontime difference Bangkok.

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    #2

    Re: Could someone please improve this Sentence for me?

    Two things

    This is a lot more than one sentence.

    What do you mean by "Please prepare yourself"?
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    #3

    Re: Could someone please improve this Sentence for me?

    What do you mean by "Please prepare yourself"? : I mean prepare my self to answer Mr. Cavin

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    Re: Could someone please improve this Sentence for me?

    Quote Originally Posted by mooyong View Post
    What do you mean by "Please prepare yourself"? : I mean prepare myself to answer Mr. Cavin
    I am more confused about that than before.
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    #5

    Re: Could someone please improve this Sentence for me?

    What is the idea of telling yourself to prepare yourself?

    I suggest you check your writing again for spelling and grammar mistakes and write proper sentences. A sentence should start with a capital letter and end will a full-stop, not a comma.
    I am sure you can do better than that.

    Gold should be goal.
    Plumbing, not plumping.
    Say: I like your country very much, not I very like your country.
    Last edited by tedmc; 29-Apr-2019 at 15:34. Reason: Edited out non-functioning code
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    #6

    Email

    Let's look at #5.

    Q:What did you like about training in Hong Kong?
    A: I like your country very much. It is clean and safe, and I like the transportation system.

    I suggest that you find the "Thank" button and that you get acquainted with the quote feature.

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    #7

    Re: Email

    Thank for you support.
    I think I should start for short sentense.
    “HR officer was email to me” this sentense is correct

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    Re: Email

    Quote Originally Posted by mooyong View Post
    Thank you for your help.
    I think I should start for short sentense.
    I think you mean:

    I think I should write shorter sentences.
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    Re: Email

    Quote Originally Posted by mooyong View Post
    “HR officer was email to me” this sentense is correct
    Since it's not a sentence, no. It's not. Also, it's unclear what is intended.
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    #10

    Re: Could someone please improve this Sentence for me?

    Quote Originally Posted by mooyong View Post
    HR officer Email to me tomorrow I will meet Ms. Cavin She is CEO at Engineering company Please prepare yourself.
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    Hello, Mooyong:

    Do you mean something like this:


    "I have received an email from human resources informing me that I should be prepared to meet Ms. Cavin tomorrow."


    P.S. In post #3, you refer to "Mr." Cavin. Is the CEO a man or woman?


    Best wishes

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