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    Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Would you please help me correct the following writing for grammars, vocabularies, ...
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    Most people believe that it should be compulsory for young people to help the local community through voluntary work in their pastime. However, I do not completely agree with this statement.

    From a personal perspective, it can be argued that teenagers are under high pressure with their studies so it will result in the lack of their opportunity to have spare time. Most young people may not only attend classes at school every day but also do homework and study with tutors at home. Therefore, if they are required to spend their whole free time to help local community, they may not have any time to entertain with their friend and even with their family or attend courses to improve their soft skills.

    On the societal level, by forcing young people to work on volunteer basis in their free time, society will not gain any beneficial value. Firstly, it may be not fair for teenagers to sacrifice their time to do what they seem not to volunteer. Secondly, young people may not feel comfortable to be forced to do volunteer but they feel that they are being used. For example, children are required to collect all rubbish surrounding their living area on every weekend and they may have to take their all free time to do this, they will think they are being treated like a cleaner. A good society which has the best system should be a free and fair place

    In conclusion, doing voluntary work to help community can be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I believe that we should not make this compulsory.
    Last edited by dcintel; 08-May-2019 at 07:57.

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    #2

    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by dcintel View Post
    Would you please help me by correcting the following piece of writing for with regard to grammars, vocabularies, ... grammar and vocabulary?
    Please note my corrections above.

    When do you have to submit your essay to your teacher/tutor to be marked or graded?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by dcintel View Post
    Would you please help me correct check the following writing for and correct any grammar or vocabulary mistakes you find?
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    Most Some people believe that it should be compulsory for young people to help the local community through voluntary work in their pas free time. However, I do not completely agree with this statement.

    From a personal perspective, it can be argued I can confirm that teenagers are under high pressure with their studies, so it will result in the lack of their opportunity to which means they inevitably have little spare time. Most young people may not only need to attend classes at school every day, but they must also do homework and possibly study with tutors at home. Therefore, if they are required to spend their whole free time to help the local community, they may not have any time to entertain to relax and enjoy leisure activities with their friend and even with their family or even attend courses to improve their soft skills.

    On the societal level, by forcing young people to work on volunteer voluntary basis in their free time, society will not gain any particular benefit. beneficial value. Firstly, it may be not fair for teenagers to sacrifice their time to do what they seem not to volunteer. [ This seems out of place in this paragraph. The paragraph is about society, not the individual teenagers] Secondly, young people may not feel comfortable to be forced if compelled to do volunteer but they and may feel that they are being used. For example, if children are required to collect all rubbish surrounding their living area on in their neighbourhood every weekend and they may have to if that takes all their all free time, to do this, they will think they are being used. treated like a cleaner. A good society which has the best system should be a free and fair place [ I have no idea what that means]

    In conclusion, doing voluntary work to help one's community can be beneficial for both the young individual and society as a whole. However, I believe that we should not make this compulsory.

    This reply was cross-posted. I take it that dcintel is preparing for some kind of test like IELTS of TOEFL; am I correct?

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    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    How many forums have you posted this to?
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    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Please note my corrections above.

    When do you have to submit your essay to your teacher/tutor to be marked or graded?
    Thanks for your correction. I am just practicing writing an essay, not for marking purpose :)

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    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post

    This reply was cross-posted. I take it that dcintel is preparing for some kind of test like IELTS of TOEFL; am I correct?
    Thanks for your correction. It's correct. I am preparing for IELTS test.

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    #7

    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    How many forums have you posted this to?
    I just came across this forum. It's so useful. I will post my next writing here and please help me to correct it. Before coming here, I just posted this in another forum.

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    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Thank you for letting us know that this is just for practice. We recommend that you post to just one forum, wait for responses and only then, if you are not satisfied with those responses, post on a second forum, providing a link to the first and explaining why you need more help.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Thank you for letting us know that this is just for practice. We recommend that you post to just one forum, wait for responses and only then, if you are not satisfied with those responses, post on a second forum, providing a link to the first and explaining why you need more help.
    Thanks so much. I will

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    #10

    Re: Should all teenagers be forced to do unpaid jobs

    Quote Originally Posted by dcintel View Post
    Thanks for your corrections. You got it right. I am preparing for an IELTS test.
    Let us know how you did, OK?
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