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    #31

    Re: I need help for Songs Lyrics fixing mistakes :) I am a song writer

    Dears,
    I post Lyrics of another song. This song talk about a young girl, her first big emotion with a boy.

    I donít wanna know your name
    i donít wanna be like you
    i donít see the sea over there
    i donít know if you can dream

    I donít wanna know your game
    I donít wanna breathe like you
    I donít see the fild over there
    I donít know how you play

    And now, take my hand
    Because I am burning inside
    I'm scared of what's going on between us
    I took off once before and now I don't know what to do

    Please, hold my hand
    Stay with me
    Love scares me
    Donít let me down

    For the previous song I don't undestand if this phrase works or not:
    brings death with himself.


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    #32

    Re: I need help for Songs Lyrics fixing mistakes :) I am a song writer

    Quote Originally Posted by Trace Vaon View Post
    Dears,
    I post Lyrics of another song. This song talk about a young girl, her first big emotion with a boy.

    I don’t wanna know your name
    i don’t wanna be like you
    i don’t see the sea over there
    i don’t know if you can dream

    I don’t wanna know your game
    I don’t wanna breathe like you
    I don’t see the fild over there
    I don’t know how you play

    And now, take my hand
    Because I am burning inside
    I'm scared of what's going on between us
    I took off once before and now I don't know what to do

    Please, hold my hand
    Stay with me
    Love scares me
    Don’t let me down

    For the previous song I don't undestand if this phrase works or not:
    brings death with himself.

    Hi,
    I know you have so much to do with the forum. I would like to thank you for the support you gave me.
    Please, let me know if someone can help me again with my songs fixing (5-6 songs remaining). I would like to know if I can rely on your special help again.
    Last edited by Trace Vaon; 10-Jun-2019 at 08:58. Reason: error

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    #33

    Re: I need help for Songs Lyrics fixing mistakes :) I am a song writer

    You can continue to post short extracts from your songs, one extract per thread and one at a time, in this section. Anyone who has the time and the inclination will comment.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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