[General] Reasons for absence to my best friend's birthday party

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dcintel

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Hi all,

Please help me correct the following piece of writing for grammar, vocabulary

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One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

  • apologize for missing the birthday celebration
  • explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend
  • and say what you would like to do to show that you are sorry


Hi Janet,

I hope you're doing well. I am writing to apologize because I could not participate your last birthday party on Feb-21.

I understand that you really wanted me to come and cheer with you on the birthday party. And I also know that you’re not pleased with my absence without telling you any reasons. On this occasion, I want to explain to you the reasons why. In the morning of Feb-18, my direct manager told me that I must visit a client in Germany to help them solve urgent tasks which only me could help and my flight would depart in the morning of Feb-20. I had so little time to prepare for the trip. I was pretty busy with packing clothes, preparing tools, submitting necessary papers and materials for the trip and I, therefore, forgot your birthday. Please forgive me for not calling you that I could not come for the party as soon as possible.

I know you are a big fan of chocolate. So a big Cocao chocolate box and a beautiful Casio watch will be my gifts for you as a compensation when I return home. I hope you like it.

See you soon,
Chris
 

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Hi all,

Please help me correct the following piece of writing for grammar, vocabulary

=======================
Topic:

One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

  • apologize for missing the birthday celebration
  • explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend
  • and say what you would like to do to show that you are sorry


Hi Janet,

I hope you're doing well. I am writing to apologize because I could not participate in your [STRIKE]last[/STRIKE] birthday party on Feb-21.

I understand that you really wanted me to come and [STRIKE]cheer with you on [/STRIKE] help you celebrate [STRIKE]the birthday party[/STRIKE]. And I also know that you’re not pleased with my absence without [STRIKE]telling[/STRIKE] giving you any reasons in advance. [STRIKE]On this occasion[/STRIKE][STRIKE],[/STRIKE] I want to explain to you the reasons why it was impossible for me to be there. In the morning of Feb-18, my [STRIKE]direct[/STRIKE] manager told me that I must visit a client in Germany to help them solve urgent [STRIKE]tasks[/STRIKE] issues [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] that only [STRIKE]me[/STRIKE] I could help with and my flight would depart in the morning of Feb-20. I had so little time to prepare for the trip. I was pretty busy with packing clothes, preparing tools, submitting necessary papers and materials for the trip and I[STRIKE], therefore,[/STRIKE] forgot about your birthday. Please forgive me for not calling you to let you know that I could not come for the party as soon as [STRIKE]possible[/STRIKE] I realized that it would be impossible for me to attend.

I know you are a big "fan" of chocolate. So a big Cocao chocolate box and a beautiful Casio watch will be my gifts for you as [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] compensation when I return home. I hope you like [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] them.

See you soon,
Chris

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