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    A song about life (please, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song too)

    Hi,
    this song is about life.
    Please, Angels, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics, this song too



    Life taught me no matter how good you are
    sooner or later you will cheat me
    I will have to just see if forgiveness is the right way
    I would not have to wait, I just want to know it now
    I would not have to wait, I just want to know it…

    Life has taught me that it would be good to have a living will
    It is essential to be able to choose to be free until the end
    All the history of human life has been - a struggle between
    Wisdom, foolishness, honesty and cunning

    you think that one of us - would go to join the ancient man?
    What would you do - in case of unbearable hell?
    wear the cloak - the fire is too hot
    wear your suit until the end of the match

    Life has taught me, no matter how greedy you are
    Sooner or later you will help me
    I'll just have to see if it will last long enough
    I would not have to wait
    I would not have to wait

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    Re: A song about life (please, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song t

    Quote Originally Posted by Trace Vaon View Post
    Hi,
    this song is about life.
    Please, Angels, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics, this song too
    Trace, have you paid attention to the corrections I made to your other posts? Did I leave the word "angels" in them? You also need to capitalize the start of every sentence and end the sentence with an appropriate punctuation mark. Click Edit to amend the above text in post #1. After you've done that, we'll be happy to look at your song lyrics.

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    Re: A song about life (please, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song t

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Trace, have you paid attention to the corrections I made to your other posts? Did I leave the word "angels" in them? You also need to capitalize the start of every sentence and end the sentence with an appropriate punctuation mark. Click Edit to amend the above text in post #1. After you've done that, we'll be happy to look at your song lyrics.
    Hi Teechar,

    in the last thread "A Song about my granfather (help me to fix it, please)" in post #2 you corrected me in this way:

    "
    Hi,
    This song is about my grandfather.

    Please , Angels, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song too
    "

    so I think I have to write :

    Hi,
    This song is about life.
    Please, Angels, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song too


    Is it ok?



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    Re: A song about life (please, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song t

    Hi Trace,
    I meant to remove "Angels", and now I have. Please don't use it again!
    Say, for example: "Please help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics of this song too".

    In response to your post, I don't see any glaring mistakes in the lyrics.

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    Re: A song about life (please, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song t

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Hi Trace,
    I meant to remove "Angels", and now I have. Please don't use it again!
    Say, for example: "Please help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics of this song too".

    In response to your post, I don't see any glaring mistakes in the lyrics.
    Hi Teechar,
    I didn't understand it, I am sorry.
    Now I got it.

    I am very happy for my lyrics that were correct!

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    #6

    Re: A song about life (please, help me to fix any mistakes in the lyrics. this song t

    Wisdom, foolishness, honesty and cunning.

    Better:

    Wisdom, foolishness, honesty and deceit

    Those are contrasting pairs. The word deceit is a better fit than cunning. (My opinion.)
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