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    Noon at my office

    Noon at my office

    Every day, I pause my work in my office at 11:30 am. Then I go along the corridor of my office to the canteen. In here I have lunch with my colleague. About 12 am, I come back my office with a cup of tea. In my office, my colleagues and me, we drink tea together and talk about funny things, jokes… About 12:30 am I go to take a nap. I spread a small carpet on the floor and lie on there. I sleep about thirty minutes then I get up and back to work.

    Thanks, please correct my mistakes.

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    Re: Noon at my office

    Quote Originally Posted by chunchuntthn View Post
    Noon at my office

    Every day, I pause my work in my office at 11:30 am. Then I walk down the corridor to the canteen. There I have lunch with one of my colleagues. About 12pm, I come back to my office with a cup of tea. In my office, my colleagues and I drink tea, talk, and tell jokes. About 12:30pm I take a nap. I spread a small carpet on the floor and lie on it. I sleep about thirty minutes then get up and go back to work.

    Please correct my mistakes.
    OK
    Last edited by Tarheel; 26-Jun-2019 at 23:06. Reason: Changed something
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    Re: Noon at my office

    Quote Originally Posted by chunchuntthn View Post
    Noon at my office

    Every day, I pause from my work in my office at 11:30 AM Then I go along the corridor of my office to the canteen. In here there I have lunch with my colleague. About 12 am PM, I come back to my office with a cup of tea. In my office, Then, my colleagues and me, we I drink tea together and talk about funny things, jokes… About 12:30 am PM I go to take a nap. I spread a small carpet on the floor and lie on there it. I sleep about thirty minutes, then I get up and get back to work.

    Thanks, please correct my mistakes.
    I need a job like that.

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    Re: Noon at my office

    Quote Originally Posted by chunchuntthn View Post
    I sleep about thirty minutes then I get up and back to work.
    There are a couple of ways to fix that. Either make it a compound sentence or make it two sentences. Say:

    i sleep about thirty minutes, and then I get up and go back to work.

    Or:

    I sleep about thirty minutes. Then I get up and go back to work.
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    Re: Noon at my office

    This is the first rewrite.
    Every day, I pause my work in my office at 11:30 am. Then I walk down the corridor to the canteen (Mr Tarhell Why do you italicize this text?). There I have lunch with one of my colleagues. About 12pm, I come back to my office with a cup of tea. In my office, my colleague and I drink tea, talk, and tell jokes. About 12:30pm I take a nap. I spread a small carpet on the floor and lie on it. I sleep about thirty minutes, and then I get up and go back to work.

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    Re: Noon at my office

    Sometimes I press the wrong button because my thumb is too big.(Or the buttons are too small.)


    It looks good.

    If there is only one other person that you work with you don't have to say one of my colleagues, but in the original there seemed to be more than one.

    I might have missed something, but I don't think so.
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    Re: Noon at my office

    In case you missed it amongst the multiple corrections:

    12pm = noon
    12am = midnight
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Noon at my office

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    In case you missed it amongst the multiple corrections:

    12pm = noon
    12am = midnight
    Are we really 100% certain of that? I'd be grateful for an authoritative reference.

    The reason I have never been sure goes back again to my useless education in the classics. A.M. and P.M. are abbreviations for ante meridiem and post meridiem, which mean before noon and after noon. Of course noon is neither before nor after itself and midnight is equally before and after. I don't want to be pedantic, i just want to be quite sure at long last.

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    Re: Noon at my office

    In my writing I've always eschewed 12 am and 12 pm in favour of noon and midnight, for fear of ambiguity. The National Physical Laboratory, which bills itself as The Source of UK Time says:

    "By convention, 12 am refers to midnight at the start of the specified day (00:00 on the 24 hour clock) and 12 pm to midnight at the end of that day (24:00 on the 24 hour clock)."

    Here is the authoritative reference.

    https://www.npl.co.uk/resources/q-a/...t-12am-or-12pm

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    Re: Noon at my office

    Immediately after noon has struck, it's afternoon.

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