[Grammar] Today the sunshine with the brightness

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Is there anybody here to check whether the sentences I wrote are correct or not?

Today the sunshine with the brightness coming through all over the places shows how I was born and this evening the clouds in the dark side reflect on the difference than before like the sand, and also the crescent moon are so attractive that when I close to it, it became spurred to escape. So wonderful it is that I finally became a man with mature, a grown-up.
 
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teechar

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Hi. I don't understand the above
Try to rewrite it using many (8-10) separate sentences. You can number those sentences, if you like.

By the way, are you really in Albania?
 
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Tarheel

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It seems to be a series of non sequiturs. I suggest that you start all over.
 
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