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  1. Newbie
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    #1

    Today the sunshine with the brightness

    Is there anybody here to check whether the sentences I wrote are correct or not?

    Today the sunshine with the brightness coming through all over the places shows how I was born and this evening the clouds in the dark side reflect on the difference than before like the sand, and also the crescent moon are so attractive that when I close to it, it became spurred to escape. So wonderful it is that I finally became a man with mature, a grown-up.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 06-Jul-2019 at 18:31. Reason: Put the wording of the original title in the main body of the post

  2. teechar's Avatar
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    #2

    Re: Today the sunshine with the brightness

    Hi. I don't understand the above
    Try to rewrite it using many (8-10) separate sentences. You can number those sentences, if you like.

    By the way, are you really in Albania?
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 06-Jul-2019 at 18:32. Reason: Made title match new original

  3. Tarheel's Avatar
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    #3

    Re: Today the sunshine with the brightness

    It seems to be a series of non sequiturs. I suggest that you start all over.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 06-Jul-2019 at 18:32. Reason: Made title match new original
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