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    Diary - summer day

    Hong Kong is summer now. I feel extremely hot. I don't even want to step out of my home but today I still went outside for lunch. When I am out, I always use an umbrella to block the sunlight because it hurts when I am in the sun. But even if I use the umbrella, the heat would reflect from the ground and then steam my legs. During the walk to having lunch, I felt like I was melting and dying; all my blood was flowing out of my skin. I already kept drinking water but that didn't help much as my head became painful. I couldn't imagine the 10-minute walk could do me a headache. Finally, I waited until sunset in the restaurant and went back home.
    If I make any mistakes in English, please let me know! Please~~Thank you :)

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    #2

    Re: Diary - summer day

    Quote Originally Posted by Maybo View Post
    Hong Kong is summer now.
    Is Hong Kong a season?
    Do you know how to fix that?

    Quote Originally Posted by Maybo View Post
    I feel extremely hot. I don't even want to step out of my home, but today I still went out side for lunch. When I am out, I always use an umbrella to block the sunlight because it hurts when I am in the sun. But even if I use the umbrella, the heat would reflect radiating from the ground and then steam hurts my legs. During the walk to having lunch, As I walked to the restaurant, I felt like I was melting and dying! all my blood was flowing out of my skin. I already kept drinking drank a lot of water before going out, but that didn't help much as I started to get a headache.my head became painful. I couldn't imagine the that a 10-minute walk in the sun could do me trigger a headache. Finally, I waited until sunset in the restaurant and went back home.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 12-Jul-2019 at 18:30. Reason: Fixed typo

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    #3

    Re: Diary - summer day

    The season of Hong Kong is summer now?
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    #4

    Re: Diary - summer day

    Hint: dummy subject.

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    #5

    Re: Diary - summer day

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Hint: dummy subject.
    It is summer now in Hong Kong?
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    #6

    Re: Diary - summer day

    Yes, well done, but without the question mark, of course!

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    #7

    Re: Diary - summer day

    The heat gives you a headache?
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    Re: Diary - summer day

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    The heat gives you a headache?
    Yes, maybe I got dehydrated.
    If I make any mistakes in English, please let me know! Please~~Thank you :)

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    #9

    Re: Diary - summer day

    Try to rewrite "steam my legs". That verb doesn't work. Note that it should have been "steams" because the subject is "the heat".

    If all your blood was flowing out of your skin, you would be bleeding to death. That's not the same as melting.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Diary - summer day

    Stay hydrated! Drink plenty of water!
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