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    Lyrics to a song of mine

    These are the lyrics to a song I have written. I wish to know how it can be improved. There must be grammatical mistakes, sentences that sound unnatural, or whatsoever... I'd appreciate your help. Sorry about the capitalization (this is how I register my lyrics).


    CHILDHOOD MEMORIES

    I WAS WALKING ALONG THE SHORE
    TRYING TO SETTLE AN OLD SCORE
    SOME CHILDHOOD MEMORIES STILL KNOCK ON MY DOOR
    SOMEHOW THEY STICK AROUND
    EVERY NOW AND THEN
    THEY COME HOME AT NIGHT AND WEIGH ON ME

    I WAS TALKING TO MYSELF
    AFTER YEARS ON THE SHELF
    THOSE CHILDHOOD MEMORIES THEY COME IN BY STEALTH
    SOMEHOW THEY CUT ME DOWN
    EVERY NOW AND THEN
    THEY COME HOME AT NIGHT AND WEIGH ON ME

    ONCE I WAS TIRED SO I WENT TO BED
    THAT WAS THE FIRST TEARDROP I SHED
    AND THEN SHE WENT AWAY, I WISH I WERE DEAD
    BUT NOW ITíS TIME TO CHANGE
    YES, NOW ITíS TIME TO CHANGE
    BUT SOMEHOW I KNOW
    IíVE GOT TO WIPE OUT THOSE MEMORIES
    IíVE GOT TO WIPE OUT THOSE MEMORIES
    THE BITTER CHILDHOOD MEMORIES FROM MY MIND.

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Do you know what an old score is?
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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Do you know what an old score is?
    I know what "to settle an old score" is. I'm not sure about he meaning of "old score" separately. I mean, I hope it isn't a slang for something dirty....

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Quote Originally Posted by beachboy View Post
    childhood memories

    I was walking along the shore
    trying to settle an old score
    some childhood memories still knock on my door
    somehow they stick around
    every now and then
    they come home at night and weigh on me

    I was talking to myself
    after years on the shelf
    those childhood memories
    they come in by stealth
    somehow they cut me down
    every now and then
    they come home at night and weigh on me

    once I was tired so I went to bed
    that was the first teardrop I shed
    and then she went away
    I wish I were dead
    but now itís time to change
    yes, now itís time to change
    but somehow I know
    Iíve got to wipe out those memories
    Iíve got to wipe out those memories
    the bitter childhood memories from my mind.
    Next time, please do not post in all-caps.

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    I was walking along the shore
    Trying to settle an old score.


    The person has been feuding with somebody for a long time, and somehow walking along the shore is going to settle the issue once and for all

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    I was walking along the shore
    Trying to settle an old score.


    The person has been feuding with somebody for a long time, and somehow walking along the shore is going to settle the issue once and for all

    What if he's been feuding with himself because of something he regrets having done, and now he is facing sorrow/remorse? It's about childhood memories. But I'd understand if you told me "settling an old score" can never be used this way. I'd have to work it out...

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Next time, please do not post in all-caps.
    Sorry, I didn't know how to do it (now I do). I see why it's important not to post in all-caps.

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    You could say he's debating something with himself. You could even say he's been having an argument with himself. (I've said that, but when I did I meant it humorously.)
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 12-Jul-2019 at 21:33. Reason: Fixed typo
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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    You could say he"s debating something with himself. You could even say he's been having an argument with himself. (I've said that, but when I did I meant it humorously.)
    Yes, that's the idea. The problem is finding an expression with a word that rhymes with "shore" and "door". Maybe I'll have to make other changes... What about the rest? Any improvements?

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    Re: Lyrics to a song of mine

    Some childhood memories still knock on my door.

    They come home at night and lie on the floor.

    Probably not.
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