Lyrics to a song of mine

[beachboy]

These are the lyrics to a song I have written. I wish to know how it can be improved. There must be grammatical mistakes, sentences that sound unnatural, or whatsoever... I'd appreciate your help. Sorry about the capitalization (this is how I register my lyrics).


CHILDHOOD MEMORIES

I WAS WALKING ALONG THE SHORE
TRYING TO SETTLE AN OLD SCORE
SOME CHILDHOOD MEMORIES STILL KNOCK ON MY DOOR
SOMEHOW THEY STICK AROUND
EVERY NOW AND THEN
THEY COME HOME AT NIGHT AND WEIGH ON ME

I WAS TALKING TO MYSELF
AFTER YEARS ON THE SHELF
THOSE CHILDHOOD MEMORIES THEY COME IN BY STEALTH
SOMEHOW THEY CUT ME DOWN
EVERY NOW AND THEN
THEY COME HOME AT NIGHT AND WEIGH ON ME

ONCE I WAS TIRED SO I WENT TO BED
THAT WAS THE FIRST TEARDROP I SHED
AND THEN SHE WENT AWAY, I WISH I WERE DEAD
BUT NOW IT’S TIME TO CHANGE
YES, NOW IT’S TIME TO CHANGE
BUT SOMEHOW I KNOW
I’VE GOT TO WIPE OUT THOSE MEMORIES
I’VE GOT TO WIPE OUT THOSE MEMORIES
THE BITTER CHILDHOOD MEMORIES FROM MY MIND.

 

[Tarheel]

Do you know what an old score is?

 

[beachboy]

Do you know what an old score is?

I know what "to settle an old score" is. I'm not sure about he meaning of "old score" separately. I mean, I hope it isn't a slang for something dirty....

 

[teechar]

childhood memories

I was walking along the shore
trying to settle an old score
some childhood memories still knock on my door
somehow they stick around
every now and then
they come home at night and weigh on me

I was talking to myself
after years on the shelf
those childhood memories
they come in by stealth
somehow they cut me down
every now and then
they come home at night and weigh on me

once I was tired so I went to bed
that was the first teardrop I shed
and then she went away
I wish I were dead
but now it’s time to change
yes, now it’s time to change
but somehow I know
I’ve got to wipe out those memories
I’ve got to wipe out those memories
the bitter childhood memories from my mind.

Next time, please do not post in all-caps.

 

[Tarheel]

I was walking along the shore
Trying to settle an old score.

The person has been feuding with somebody for a long time, and somehow walking along the shore is going to settle the issue once and for all

:-|

 

[beachboy]

I was walking along the shore
Trying to settle an old score.

The person has been feuding with somebody for a long time, and somehow walking along the shore is going to settle the issue once and for all

:-|

What if he's been feuding with himself because of something he regrets having done, and now he is facing sorrow/remorse? It's about childhood memories. But I'd understand if you told me "settling an old score" can never be used this way. I'd have to work it out...

 

[beachboy]

Next time, please do not post in all-caps.

Sorry, I didn't know how to do it (now I do). I see why it's important not to post in all-caps.

 

[Tarheel]

You could say he's debating something with himself. You could even say he's been having an argument with himself. (I've said that, but when I did I meant it humorously.)

 

[beachboy]

You could say he"s debating something with himself. You could even say he's been having an argument with himself. (I've said that, but when I did I meant it humorously.)

Yes, that's the idea. The problem is finding an expression with a word that rhymes with "shore" and "door". Maybe I'll have to make other changes... What about the rest? Any improvements?

 

[Tarheel]

Some childhood memories still knock on my door.

They come home at night and lie on the floor.

Probably not.

 

[Tarheel]

I was sleepy so I went to bed.
I lay down to rest my weary head.