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    #1

    Anna was morose the whole morning

    Have I made any mistakes? I didn't use the inverted commas after "a thought struck him" because the majority of writers do not use them in these kinds of sentence nowadays.

    Anna was morose the whole morning, and David wondered what he had done. He opened The Times and started to read it, and a thought struck him, Hell, I've forgotten her birthday. She is going to kill me if she doesn't get a present.
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    Re: Anna was morose the whole morning

    There's an obvious punctuation mistake.

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    #3

    Re: Anna was morose the whole morning

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Have I made any mistakes? I didn't use the inverted commas after "a thought struck him" because the majority of writers do not use them in these kinds of sentence nowadays.

    Anna was morose the whole morning, and David wondered what he had done. He opened The Times and started to read it, and a thought struck him, Hell, I've forgotten her birthday. She is going to kill me if she doesn't get a present.
    This dialog works much better than the others we've discussed recently. It's clear whose point of view is referenced throughout.

    I think the comma splice is effective as a way to clearly connect the thought with its introduction.
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    Re: Anna was morose the whole morning

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I didn't use the inverted commas after "a thought struck him" because the majority of writers do not use them in these kinds of sentence nowadays.
    You could use italics.

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