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    Bob visited his hometown for the first time

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    Bob visited his hometown for the first time after more than forty years of absence. He walked around but was unable to recognise a single building. The town and the people he had known existed only in his mind, and that hurt him. He had hoped to find a home but instead found nothing of interest.

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    Re: Bob visited his hometown for the first time

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Bob visited his hometown for the first time after more than forty years of absence.
    That's not wrong, but consider:
    Bob visited his hometown after being away for forty years.
    or
    Bob visited his hometown for the first time in forty years.

    What do you mean by "a home"?

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    Re: Bob visited his hometown for the first time

    By "a home" I didn't mean a physical object, but a sense of home. Maybe I expressed my wrongly, but I couldn't remember any better expression.

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    Re: Bob visited his hometown for the first time

    But that doesn't connect with "but found nothing of interest". I suggest you rephrase that sentence.

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    Re: Bob visited his hometown for the first time

    To me those two sentence connect, but I could be wrong.
    Bob returned to his hometown hoping to find that home he once lived in, be it physical or emotional. Unfortunately, when he saw that the town had completely changed, he found nothing of interest. The memories and the town he once left existed only in his mind.

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    Re: Bob visited his hometown for the first time

    Ah, now I get it!
    Try:
    He had hoped to find the place he once called home but instead found nothing of interest.



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