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    #1

    Although David is an affluent man

    Have I made any mistakes?

    Although David is an affluent man, he never flaunts his wealth. You can see him walking casually in a pair of threadbare Levi's and worn sneakers, looking like a man who is down on his luck.

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    #2

    Re: Although David is an affluent man

    No mistakes.

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    #3

    Re: Although David is an affluent man

    I am only wondering if it would be possible to delete "who is". Or maybe "be down on his luck" is a fixed phrase that can't be changed?

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    #4

    Re: Although David is an affluent man

    I'm sure it can be changed, in the right sentence, but you've set it up such that it doesn't appear to be changeable.
    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    a man ... down on his luck.

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    #5

    Re: Although David is an affluent man

    It works for me without who is.
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    #6

    Re: Although David is an affluent man

    Grammatically, it may be omissible, but to me the sentence sounds better with it.

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    #7

    Re: Although David is an affluent man

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Grammatically, it may be omissible, but to me the sentence sounds better with it.
    The sentence's rhythm is certainly better with it included.
    I am not a teacher.

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