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    A song.

    Good night! Correct please my translation a song into English.
    Watch yourself.
    Author: Victor Tsoy.
    Group "Kino" (film)

    They say to somebody today:"Good-bye"
    Tomorrow they'll say:"Rest in pease"
    The injure of heart will be scarlet.
    Tomorrow somebody returning to his home
    Will see his city broken,
    Someone will fall down from crane.
    Watch yourself! Be careful!
    Watch yourself!

    Tomorrow somebody lying in bad
    Will understand that he'll ill incurably,
    Another one coming out of the house
    Will get under a car.
    Tomorrow somewhere in a hospital
    The arm of young surgeon will falter,
    Someone will trip a mine.
    Watch yourself! Be careful!
    Watch yourself!

    Last night a plane flew over us.
    Tomorrow it will fall down into an ocean,
    All the passengers will die.
    Tomorrow somewhere, nobody knows where,
    Will be a war, or an epidemic, or a snow storm,
    Or black holes of universe.
    Watch yourself! Be careful!
    Watch yourself!

    Thank you.

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    #2

    Thank me now

    Perhaps:

    A heart will bleed scarlet.

    ,,,

    Someone will fall from a crane.

    You may thank me now.
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    #3

    Re: Thank me now

    Try:

    Will understand that he's incurably ill.

    I don't understand the part about falling under a car.
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    Re: Thank me now

    It's the OR mistakes they don't fix before they leave the operating room that are a problem.
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    Re: Thank me now

    You could run it through a spell checker. That will pick up 'pease', and maybe some other errors.

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    #6

    Re: A song.

    Try:

    Last night a plane flew overhead. Tomorrow it will fall into the ocean


    (I hope not.)
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    #7

    Re: A song.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Try:

    Last night a plane flew overhead. Tomorrow it will fall into the ocean


    (I hope not.)
    Why do you write "the ocean"?
    The plane will fall (i hope not too) into some ocean, Into Indian Ocean or into Pacific. Why one must tell "the ocean"?

    Can I tell "above us" instead of "overhead"?

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    Re: A song.

    Quote Originally Posted by Fatdog View Post
    Why do you write "the ocean"?
    The plane will fall (i hope not too) into some ocean, Into the Indian Ocean or into the Pacific. Why one must tell "the ocean"?

    Can I tell "above us" instead of "overhead"?
    People are all the time getting "say" and "tell" mixed up.

    Yes, you can say "above us" instead of "overhead". It's not terrible.

    It's always "the" ocean. There is just one ocean that has different names in different places.
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    Re: A song.

    You can be hit by a car crossing the street, but I wouldn't be worried about being hit by a car just because I was going outside.
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    Re: A song.

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    You can be hit by a car crossing the street, but I wouldn't be worried about being hit by a car just because I was going outside.
    I'll think about the translation of that sentence of the song.

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